Real name: Jayadev Calamur
Member Since: 03/15/2006
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I liked the effect of the Wingardium Leviosa... that spell always reminds me of Emma Watson in the 1st movie saying, "It's 'leviosaaa' not 'leviorsa'. LOL
I found it slightly weird that Snape refers to Riddle as "Lord Voldemort" and not "The Dark Lord"
The moment of beard removing was pretty sweet too
A very nice chapter
LOL! Yeah, every time I hear or write that spell, I hear Emma saying that with her "superior" expression! LOL! Glad you liked the chapter!
there were parts of the chapter that i loved and some parts that left me a bit confused
i loved the HP girl fan club thing.... i can picture a bunch of teenage girls drooling over harry and him feeling all weird about it
Snape is a bit confusing. Considering that he wanted to murder Harry after Harry checked out his memory, he actually is having a civilized conversation with him in the book. As much as you said Harry grew up after book5 he and Snape would still loath each other. Harry blames Snape for Sirius's death and Snape blames Harry for existing
But a very well written chapter. Sorry about the concrit. It's something I always do
I don\'t remember which chapter you\'re on, but at various times in canon and in my fics, Snape actually HELPS Harry, despite their mutual distrust and loathing, so Harry, as he matures, goes from simple loathing to a bit of confusion about the man, justifiably so, I think. Snape\'s behavior isn\'t consistant with that of a mortal enemy. Sometimes he HELPS, such as when he saved Harry from falling off the broom in PS/SS. I\'m just building on that, adding to the confusion, because I find it quite interesting. You\'ll see that as you go on through the stories.
Glad you\'re enjoying it! And your crit wasn\'t nearly as nasty as a lot I\'ve had. Thanks for the "sorry" though - those who are the most bloodthirsty never bother to think that there\'s a living, breathing person on the other end of this computer screen who might be hurt by what they said. I appreciate your consideration!
Poor Harry... he tries to get better and a Voldemort follower manages to do the unthinkable to him
Nice chapter again.... i liked Hermione's revenge on Bulstrode
Yeah, I think Hermione got a "kick" out of that too! Glad you liked it!
Nice chapter... I felt it just went a bit too long but then I still liked it
Ron reminds me a lot of Samwise Gamgee in this story. I assume you agree with my theory too
Multiple animagii! :) i like.
If you think these chapters are long, wait until you read "Destiny" - by that time, I had readers DEMANDING longer chapters, and of course, I try to please my readers (as long as it pleases me, too, of course! LOL!) Ron is like Sam in his unending loyalty to Harry, yup, although he does have his moments of annoyance with Harry too, at times (he is only human, after all). Glad you like the multiple animagi!
long chapter again.. :-). the intimate moments with Harry and Ginny were really well written.... very aesthetic
I liked the ravens dealing with Malfoy and his goons
the dream was a bit sinister but well written
Thanks a lot! I liked the way the ravens dealt with Malfoy & Co. too! And I could hear Harry laughing about it long afterward. . .heehee. Glad you enjoyed the chapter!
BTW - I\'m going on vacation, so if you don\'t get a response from me for a while, that\'s why. Keep reviewing, I\'ll respond to them when I get back!
I don't want to get on your Harry's bad side. He might think my head is a boulder and I'll be related to the headless horseman :P
One query I have in this chapter is this: He looked around the room. “Which of you seen or been near Dementors?” All the second year and above students raised their hands. “Yes, I thought so. Some came on the Hogwarts Express last year... weren't the dementors only travelling on the express in book3
I loved the quiddich match.... they are always relaxing and flow beautifully....writing it is an art, especially when you're adding commentary also
Hope you have a good vacation :-)
Thanks so much for your kind words about my Quidditch match! A lot of people think I write those well, which amazes (and pleases!) me, since I\'ve never been one for team sports, either to participate in or watch. I\'m glad they turned out so well!
I researched everything as well as possible, but it\'s been a while since I wrote Refiner\'s. I think there must have been some on the train or I wouldn\'t have written it that way. Or are you referring to Destiny? If you\'re reading Destiny, there were Dementors on the train in Refiners somewhere, I think. It\'s been a long time since I read (or wrote) either novel and I\'m in the middle of an original one now, so my memory may be faulty on what\'s in the chapters. But I did check timelines and so on as well as I could, so if I said there were dementors there, there must have been at SOME point!
Abraxan, leaving this afternoon!! YAY! (Thanks for the good wishes!)
Really nice chapter..... the thought of Crabbe and Goyle having dialogues is crazy since JK says they grunt most of the time....the only time they spoke was when Harry and Ron dressed up like them
The Dementor scene was slightly weird in my opinion because they suddenly came and went. Sheesh... there I rant again about tiny flaws :-S
I love the story and hats off to you for putting such a phenomenol effort in this
I have read TOD... I reviewed on other fanfic sites and I hope to review it once you put it up :-)
I'm a London Lions fan.... GO LIONS
So do you have your Lions shirt yet??? I\'m going to meet Kelpie, my Brit-picker, for the first time while on this trip! We\'re both going to wear Lions shirts so we\'ll recognize each other! :-D Go to www.thesculptedhorse.com/abraxan.html to order one. I don\'t keep a lot in stock, and as I said, I\'m going on vacation, but I\'ll fill your order ASAP. If you\'re ordering a size over XL, I\'ll need to send you an email with a Paypal button in it, because I couldn\'t figure out how to put in so many different prices (the shipping is more on the larger sizes, as well as the cost of the shirts being more - I\'m offering sizes up to 10 XL, and yes, I HAVE filled orders for shirts that size).
Hey, don\'t rant about tiny flaws NOW! :-D I\'m not changing these stories - they are what they are and I\'ve moved on to other things (my original novel, some ficlets to fill in the gaps in Destiny\'s epilogue). And you\'re right, it was a HUGE effort - over two years of my life to write, polish and upload these two. If I\'d been doing them for real-life publication, I would\'ve spent longer on them, but I had a "chapter a week" upload schedule that was sometimes hard to meet! Glad you\'re enjoying my stories! Thanks for reviewing on here - this has been a particularly slow site for my stories for some reason.
I love the way you have written Hagrid in the story. Identical to JK's Hagrid.... even the accent is perfect
Again great chapter
Thanks a LOT! That "accent" is HARD to write!! The character himself isn\'t hard to write at all - but the accent was a real job for me! Glad you like it!
Poor Pansy... Draco is such a $%&!^#%$ in this story..... but he seems more brave and gutsy than he did in t books. he is pretty spineless in those.... here he seems to be lying his way out
I liked the way you wrote the ball too....
Thanks so much! Yeah, I thought JKR was taking the easy way out in the way she wrote Draco - not giving him enough of a spine. Bullies are cowards at heart, but they at least have some bravado, and as they mature, they often develop some guts (some FORM of guts, anyway - ick!) so they can keep bullying people who now may be bigger or more powerful than they are. Draco\'s ambitious (he IS a Slytherin, after all!) and he\'s trying to gain Voldemort\'s approval (warped sense of values there!!), so he\'s doing more "gutsy" bullying, I guess you could say. :-) It simply seemed the logical way to grow the character to me. Glad you like it!
Glad you enjoyed the ball, too!
LOL this was a nice chapter.... i know it's a bit too late, but where did you get the idea of the Adfero. It's brilliant
Thanks! I got the idea from Goblet of Fire, when Dumbledore sent a silvery thing shaped a bit like a bird to Hagrid when they found Barty Crouch, Sr., dead. It was a message spell. So I looked up "communication" and "message" and related words in an online English/Latin, English/Italian (etc.) dictionary and came up with "Adfero" (it should be explained in the Author\'s Notes for that chapter). I didn\'t know when I wrote this that JKR had designed these "message spells" as Patronuses (Patroni?). Remus said back in PoA that not even many mature wizards could do the Patronus Charm, so how could someone like Mundungus Fletcher be expected to do it? So if JKR\'s thinks the Patronus Charm is what the Order is using for communication, then the Patronus Charm isn\'t as difficult as Remus (and JKR) said it was (if Dung can do it, anyone can do it, IMO, LOL!). So I think it\'s better to have the Adfero be separate from the Patronus Charm - and I wrote it before HBP came out anyway, so I didn\'t know that was supposed to be a Patronus. ;-)
Yup, I\'m writing this response too fast and rambling - hope it makes sense to you and answers your question, anyway! Glad you liked it! And since you\'ve read Destiny - I like the other "communication" system I set up there VERY well! And I won\'t say more so I won\'t spoil it for those who haven\'t read it, but I invented that one completely and am quite pleased with it.