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Categories: Orphan; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: None
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Chapters: 0 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 0; Read Count: 0; Completed: No
Updated: 12/31/1969; Published: 12/31/1969
Reviewer: Ham (Signed)
05/13/2005
Loved the whole conversation between the Twins and Arthur. Excellently written. I love the way they are so protective about Harry.
About this oath thing... a little detail would be appreciated. Why does anyone need permission? I mean couldn't Ginny just have taken the oath? Is it some sort of magical oath that requires a ceremony? Details of this would be lovely.
The whole hospital scene was very, very well done. I'm impressed with the whole chapter overall. Your best yet.
Author's Response: Glad you asked. I will go back over that, but in later part of the story , we will find out that Ginny has already taken an oath of her own and we will find out the reason for it...because actually, Ginny is to become a part of the weapon that the Dark Lord knows not......... I must have forgotten to mention the ceremony.ooops! thanks for that! (insert Ron Weasley's voice for the last part) Thanks again, and for your help, more HUGS!
Author's Response: Glad you asked. I will go back over that, but in later part of the story , we will find out that Ginny has already taken an oath of her own and we will find out the reason for it...because actually, Ginny is to become a part of the weapon that the Dark Lord knows not......... I must have forgotten to mention the ceremony.ooops! thanks for that! (insert Ron Weasley's voice for the last part) Thanks again, and for your help, more HUGS!
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Reviewer: Ham (Signed)
05/13/2005
The Dursley's visit was well done and I loved the caring Mcgonagall. Jeconais has addicted me to the friendly Mcgonagall and now I can't get enough of it.
I was amused by the Harry/Snape interaction and I think its going to be great fun when Harry gets well. Fred and Georges visit was like a breath of fresh air and I couldn't help laughing.
Your story keeps getting better and i see tremendous potemntial. If you put in a little more effort in your descriptions and chapter lenghts and make the writing a bit smoother it could become a classic.
Author's Response: HI again! I'm so happy to hear from you! It is so hard to strike a balance between what is tooooo loonnnng and what is long enough. I've had people say both, 'too long' or 'too short' so I'm never quite sure as I do have the tendancy to go on a bit, as you can see by my long responses. I like your honesty and your kindess. I will most certainly try to clarify a little bit more just how it is that Tyler knows so much aobut Snape and Harry. Actually, Tyler develops more as a character in the next few chapter, but someone warned me not to make a new character too strong in the beginning or I would lose canon fans, so I felt kind of 'damned if I did and damned if I didn't......so I compromised and developed Tyler a little later.....and he is a very important link as to why the story is called 'The Fifth House' too, so you are right, he should probably be introduced a little better. He is not what he seems at all. I must read something by Jeconaise as I've seen the name around a lot. Do you write? You mentioned that you would like to see Snape go back to his old self...you won't be disappointed with his character (I hope!!) There is also more to his past in this story than has been explored in canon and I'm dying to know how you will react to something Dumbledore is going to reveal to Harry soon! I absolutely love the Weasley twins! I hope you like one of their significant visits they pay to Harry later on at Hogwarts......very in character, but just a little different. I have taken notes on your suggestions to add when I repost a better version of this tale once I'm done posting it in it's entirety. It has over 750 pages and I want to post it all before the real HBP comes out. Thank you for always being here with your solid advice and encouragement. It really helps!! HUGS!!
Author's Response: HI again! I'm so happy to hear from you! It is so hard to strike a balance between what is tooooo loonnnng and what is long enough. I've had people say both, 'too long' or 'too short' so I'm never quite sure as I do have the tendancy to go on a bit, as you can see by my long responses. I like your honesty and your kindess. I will most certainly try to clarify a little bit more just how it is that Tyler knows so much aobut Snape and Harry. Actually, Tyler develops more as a character in the next few chapter, but someone warned me not to make a new character too strong in the beginning or I would lose canon fans, so I felt kind of 'damned if I did and damned if I didn't......so I compromised and developed Tyler a little later.....and he is a very important link as to why the story is called 'The Fifth House' too, so you are right, he should probably be introduced a little better. He is not what he seems at all. I must read something by Jeconaise as I've seen the name around a lot. Do you write? You mentioned that you would like to see Snape go back to his old self...you won't be disappointed with his character (I hope!!) There is also more to his past in this story than has been explored in canon and I'm dying to know how you will react to something Dumbledore is going to reveal to Harry soon! I absolutely love the Weasley twins! I hope you like one of their significant visits they pay to Harry later on at Hogwarts......very in character, but just a little different. I have taken notes on your suggestions to add when I repost a better version of this tale once I'm done posting it in it's entirety. It has over 750 pages and I want to post it all before the real HBP comes out. Thank you for always being here with your solid advice and encouragement. It really helps!! HUGS!!
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In a war torn world, where violence and heartbreak are everywhere, Harry must find a way to unlock himself and learn to use his power. As the end of his seventh year approaches, Harry must decide what in life is really important and look inside himself to find the power to not just survive, but to live. POST OOTP
Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: General Fan Fiction
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama, Fluff, General
Warnings: Character Death, Mild Language, Sexual Situations, Strong Violence
Chapters: 39 Table of Contents Series: A Series
Word count: 122744; Read Count: 19744; Completed: Yes
Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: General Fan Fiction
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama, Fluff, General
Warnings: Character Death, Mild Language, Sexual Situations, Strong Violence
Chapters: 39 Table of Contents Series: A Series
Word count: 122744; Read Count: 19744; Completed: Yes
Updated: 05/05/2005; Published: 05/04/2005
Reviewer: Ham (Signed)
05/09/2005
Loved the first chapter. It was so fantastically done. I hope you pair off Remus with someone though.
Off to read next chapter.
Author's Response: That is in the cards. Thanks!
Author's Response: That is in the cards. Thanks!
Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Life or Love
Reviewer: Ham (Signed)
05/09/2005
That was hilarious. And sooo soo good.
I'm dying to read more so this review is going to be a bit short.
Ham
Author's Response: That's cool, I'm glad you found it funny :-D
Author's Response: That's cool, I'm glad you found it funny :-D
Chapter 2: Chapter 2: Ginny's Help
Reviewer: Ham (Signed)
05/09/2005
Wow that was kind of hard hitting. I have a feeling that it is going to be Ferret boy who is going to be the person looking to rape Ginny.
But i guess as long as Harry is around that isn't going to happen anytime soon.
Great chapter.
Author's Response: Yeah, it's a hard subject and all but I think you might be surprised at who actually saves the day. ;-)
Author's Response: Yeah, it's a hard subject and all but I think you might be surprised at who actually saves the day. ;-)
Chapter 3: Chapter 3: He's Mine
Reviewer: Ham (Signed)
05/09/2005
Damn! They got Susan! Who did it? And will she get it aborted?
This is really some sick and perverted behavior but to be expected by Death Eaters and Voldemort.
I just hope ferret boy gets his real soon. Might I suggest a gelding hex? so he can't repoplulate. EVER.
Great chapter. I am really getting into the fic.
Ham
Author's Response: Your questions will be answered and I think you'll be surprised and probably also happy by what those answers are. You and I were thinking along the same lines... but I think you have to wait for a few more chapters.
Author's Response: Your questions will be answered and I think you'll be surprised and probably also happy by what those answers are. You and I were thinking along the same lines... but I think you have to wait for a few more chapters.
Chapter 4: Chapter 4: Full Impact
Reviewer: Ham (Signed)
05/09/2005
Your chapters are all lovely so far. This one was pretty good too. I like the Martial Arts angle as I am using it in my fic too.
Ham
Author's Response: I love karate is well, so I had to work it in.
Author's Response: I love karate is well, so I had to work it in.
Chapter 5: Chapter 5: Fancy Footwork
Reviewer: Ham (Signed)
05/09/2005
Wow I am really interested in finding out how Harry managed to animate those objects. I have a feeling it had something to do with Ginny.
Great Chapter again.
Ham
Author's Response: Good observation.
Author's Response: Good observation.
Chapter 6: Chapter 6: Learn More Faster
Reviewer: Ham (Signed)
05/09/2005
Wow! I love the fic so far. It is obvious that Harry is falling for Ginny and that Ginny still has feeling for Harry and maybe even loves him. Should be good going.
I am very eager to find out what sent Hermione running off.
Ham
Author's Response: Oh yes, Hermione does come up with all sorts of thing. I find her fun to write.
Author's Response: Oh yes, Hermione does come up with all sorts of thing. I find her fun to write.
Chapter 7: Chapter 7: Hiding Feelings
Reviewer: Ham (Signed)
05/09/2005
Ok I had a few issues with this chapter. I don't think that being the person Harry is he would ever just sit there and let Hermione dictate his love life and tell him he is in love.
Firstly he would be very uncomfortably and probably get angry. Secondly he would probably be speechless with shock and not just sit there and let Hermione go on and on.
The rest of the chapter was fairly good though a bit rushed.
Author's Response: Okay, let's address those issues cause I've had several people not like this chapter and I forgot to rewrite it *blushes* so that I showed what I wanted. In my head, Harry is looking more at GInny and how she is feeling. I see him as more worried about her than himself or what he's feeling. At this time in his life, I wanted it to seem like he's past a lot of the selfish immaturity of teenagerhood. Okay, well, if that doesn't make sense let me know and you can always email me.
Author's Response: Okay, let's address those issues cause I've had several people not like this chapter and I forgot to rewrite it *blushes* so that I showed what I wanted. In my head, Harry is looking more at GInny and how she is feeling. I see him as more worried about her than himself or what he's feeling. At this time in his life, I wanted it to seem like he's past a lot of the selfish immaturity of teenagerhood. Okay, well, if that doesn't make sense let me know and you can always email me.
Chapter 8: Chapter 8: Admit