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Updated: 12/31/1969; Published: 12/31/1969
Reviewer: Ham (Signed)
09/06/2005
Again a wonderful chapter. The Harry - Ginny animosity has potential to exploade into a gloriously passionate get-together. Off to read the next chapter.

Author's Response: Later it will definitely explode! LOL. Thanks!



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Reviewer: Ham (Signed)
09/06/2005
Another good chapter. The part where Harry realizes that he fancies Ginny is a bit too sudden. Maybe you should have tried to give it a bit more 'realization time'. Two chapters ago he was snapping at her and now he fancies her... Its just too fast... Or maybe you could show just how he came to fancy her. What traits of her attract him.. Maybe you could show the process where he unconsciously notices her. Thats the meat of the story. It would be interesting if you could insert it in. Off to read next chapter

Author's Response: Harry realized his feelings for Ginny during the summer before sixth year. There will be at least one more chapter from Harry's POV explaining a lot of what he feels and how he got there. Thanks again!



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Reviewer: Ham (Signed)
09/06/2005
Uh-oh... out of the pan and into the fire. The mix is getting more and more interesting. Loved the description of Ginny early on in the chapter. Very beautiful. Off to read next chapter.

Author's Response: LOL. That is certainly true! Ginny is a bit of a firecracker.



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Reviewer: Ham (Signed)
09/06/2005
LOL it was a lovely read. Just right length and flow was smooth. Please update soon. Can't wait to read more.

Author's Response: Thanks again! The fluff at the end was for Sally. She was desperate for it. I had to tease just a bit.



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Updated: 12/31/1969; Published: 12/31/1969
Reviewer: Ham (Signed)
05/09/2005
That was brilliant! Most of the chapter was just hilarious and the ending was very beautiful. You have done a fantastic job in describing Harry's frame of mind.

Author's Response: Wow thanks! My first review on this site! I'm flattered. I'll be posting chapter two tonight. If it's allowed, I'll post several at once just to get the ball rolling. I plan on twice weekly posts as the story is finished and it's now just a matter of getting it out there before the real sixth year book comes out...can't wait for that. I can't tell you how much I appreciate that you took the time to read my story and I really hope to hear from you again on subsequent chapters. Thanks for being my first reviewer, that is very special. HUGS!!!!



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Reviewer: Ham (Signed)
05/09/2005
Please post up more chapters soon. You can post as many as you want at once as we have not started moderating or betaing the chapters yet. I am very eager to read more. Ham P.s - Very honored to be your first reviewer

Author's Response: Cool...so maybe I'll put up four more just to get things rolling. Thanks so much for the information. I think this will be a fantastic site because it's seems very supportive to the authors. I have twenty six chapters ready to go and about 26 more on top of that which just require editing and spell and grammar checks. I feel happy that you want to read more! Thanks so much for the kind encouragement, I really appreciate it! HUGS again!



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Reviewer: Ham (Signed)
05/10/2005
The whole chapter was fantastic. I Loved the interactions with Tyler and Stephanie and how Harry is playing Petunia. Or should i say was? Damn it! I think this was a big set up. Harry is in some deep trouble now. Can't wait to read more. Hope you update soon. Ham

Author's Response: cool! I'm glad you like Tyler! I have stuck with only one new character as I have been told that it is a good idea not to have too many. Thank you so much for taking the time to review for me! It is so nice of you! HUGS!



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Reviewer: Ham (Signed)
05/10/2005
Ok there is only one word to describe the chapter... STORMY. But it was more than a little muddled up and it seemed to jump a lot. The smooth flow from the previous two chapters was missing. Oh well... good plot line up till now. I can't wait to read more.

Author's Response: I will have to go back and have a good look at this chapter to see if I can fix it up some more based on your findings. I really appreciate your honesty! You have been very supportive so far and I hope the 'muddled' look doesn't discourage you from continuing to read this. What I am doing, is taking advice from places where I post and based on that list, I am eventually going to edit a lot of the stuff that is too long (you'll see what I mean later in the story) and fix up the mistakes that are pointed out along the way. I have finished the entire story, so I'm first going to post it in it's entirety and edit for a re post in it's improved form later based on honest reviews like this. You are very kind to encourage me and also to point areas of concern. I really appreciate it and hope to see you back for chapter four..gulp! I hope it's a little better...Thanks again and HUGS!



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Reviewer: Ham (Signed)
05/13/2005
Great chapter. The flow was hurried and frantic which was exactly what was needed for such a chapter. It kept me at the edge of my seat till the end. You know, there could be more description at many places. One of them is when Harry and Tyler take off on the Firebolt after Dumbledore leaves. Tyler is a muggle and has never sat on a broom. It is reasonable to say that he would be reluctant to get on it. Maybe you could show his reactions. Right now Tyler is there but he's just a name and not a person. I liked the Snape Harry interaction and especially the parts where he tries to goad Harry into fighting. That is so like Snape. It is also understandable that he is afraid of Harry dying and thats why the behavior change. But i fully expect him to go back to normal once Harry becomes well.


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Reviewer: Ham (Signed)
05/13/2005
One more question. I understand that Tyler finds out that Harry is different and has secrets. But how does he know that Harry is a wizard and Snape is a Potions master? How does he even know what a potions master is?

Author's Response: HI, I'll be brief, because I've left a longer response on another review. Tyler has his own brand of 'wild Magic' that is not explained yet, but I will look into explaining that sooner, as I agree with you now that I have looked over that chapter...perhaps Tyler needs a little more 3D treatment. Thanks! HUGS!



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