Penname: Spiderwort [Contact]
Real name: Mary Ellis
Member Since: 02/04/2006
Membership status: Member

I'm a fan of the so-called minor characters--McGonagall (my fave), Neville, Luna, Fred and George, Angelina, Colin Creevey, Cho, etc.   

I love new takes on old relationships, though I have a real hard time reading slash (unless it's backed up by believable background, plot twists, and characterizations.)  I have no use for gratuitous violence.

 I also like well-fleshed-out, invented characters.  Grace HasVictory's Ariadne McDougal/Remus Lupin ship comes to mind, as does the character of Alexandra in Cheryl78's 'The Snake and the Eagle.' 



Beta-reader: Yes
Gender: female


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Reviews by Spiderwort
Ginny is stuck in her house, away from everyone with her nephew, forced to survive and get by. She is forced to answer the question of what she would do differently... if she could go back.


Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: Summer Angst (CLOSED)
Classification: General Fan Fiction
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Angst, Drama, Fluff
Warnings: Character Death, Mild Language
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 3952; Read Count: 574; Completed: Yes

Updated: 04/19/2006; Published: 04/19/2006
Reviewer: Spiderwort (Signed)
05/18/2006

I like this.  It's a tad long (I'd have liked it to end after the father-daughter talk) and the mixing of verb tenses don't always work (it's soooo hard to write in the present), but you've captured teen rage and the way it really is to care for a baby perfectly--tedious and time-consuming with the occasional heart-tugging reward.

I especially like the way you showed the deaths with the hands of the clock falling off--brilliant.



Author's Response:

I have to preface this response and if you ever do read it, let me know because I would love to have a discussion with you about it.  This is going to sound snooty and I have no idea how to make it not sound that way and it isn\'t what I intend... it just is.  Does that make any sense?

 I write for myself and this was very emotional for me to write, because it was coming from a lot of RL experiences.  I work with teenagers and one in particular is giving me fits.  So I wrote from that to get out a lot of my frustration but when I got to a natural conclusion, the discusion with Arthur, I wouldn\'t stop.  I needed more happy moments or I would have felt like crap.  Since I write for myself (and I never cared about winning the challenge) I kept going until I came to a conclusion that left me feeling good.  So yes, it was long, but I felt great so... yeah :-)  Snooty-ness #1

 Please also understand that I do love critism and any way to make my stories better... I don\'t often get them so when I do I take them really into consideration... that being said, I write in first person, present tense for Ginny every day for an RPG (see my profile).  I have been doing so for about 8 months now and I am very accomplished at it.  Actually, I can\'t seem to write in past tense anymore.  I have to practise it before I attempt anything.  When I read past tense stuff it seems odd and I\'m thinking that might be what is going on for you.  I was very intensional with every tense switch.  I went through the whole thing with a friend who is an English teacher and explained everything, or corrected things that I made mistakes on.  I hope that makes sense and doesn\'t sound witchy or anything :-/  It is very possible that we both missed things and that there are mistakes!  No on is perfect afterall.  If it does sound witchy then I am truly sorry and just know that it isn\'t my intention but I did think about what you said a lot!  And again, if I\'m missing something I want to talk to you about it.  Email me or get ahold of me through a messanger any time. :-)

 The baby care stuff comes a lot from being a full time mom and some of those emotions come out that way, although I don\'t lose my patience like I had Ginny do.  I am not 16 after all ;-)  The clock bit I had as something else and my beta said, "That sucks, redo it" so I came up with them falling off which just made more sense and more of an impact.  I am glad you liked that part.

 So really... I do want to discuss this with you and thank you for putting thought into your review!!  I really appreciate that!




Chapter 1: Chapter 1

What if Voldemort chose to mark Neville as his equal instead of Harry? That's the question that this story sets out to answer. Deals mostly with his childhood to date.



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Alternate Universe (AU), General Fan Fiction
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: General
Warnings: Alternate Universe
Chapters: 26 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 32348; Read Count: 23351; Completed: No

Updated: 11/18/2006; Published: 04/23/2006
Reviewer: Spiderwort (Signed)
09/22/2006

This is a most intriguing idea.  I especially like that Frank would have chosen his mother--the redoubtable Augusta as their Secret Keeper.  So appropriate.

I also like how you cut to the chase in your ending.



Author's Response: Thank you for the review.  I'm glad you agree that there is no better secret keeper for the family than Augusta.



Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Reviewer: Spiderwort (Signed)
09/22/2006
Ooh, the plot thickens.  I like where it's going too.

Author's Response: Thank you.



Chapter 2: Chapter 2
Reviewer: Spiderwort (Signed)
11/10/2006
Ah, interesting take on the Fidelius.  Never thought of it that way, but it makes perfect sense, of course.

Author's Response: Thank you.  I wasn't aware that I was being particularly creative in my interpretation of the Fidelius. The way I've presented it is how I imagined it from it's description.



Chapter 3: Chapter 3
Reviewer: Spiderwort (Signed)
11/10/2006

you're the second writer I've read who presumes Lily's parents were both killed by DEs.  (Fanon?)

This is too cool--the way you treat the problem of the Spell vis-a-vis parenting practices.

Write on!



Author's Response:

While I know I'm not the first to suggest the Evans were killed by DEs I'd like to present my reasoning (since I rarely write anything without a reason). It is my humble opinion that Petunia hatred of magic is far too strong to be rooted merely in jealousy.  Also, her knowledge of dementors suggests some degree of familiarity with the wizarding world (I doubt she'd remember such a detail about something that had no personal siginicance to her).  Lastly, the fact that they were parents to a Muggleborn who made herself enough of an enemy in Voldemort that she'd defied him thrice, would no doubt make them DE targets.

Glad you enjoyed the chapter... thanks for reviewing. 




Chapter 4: Chapter 4
Reviewer: Spiderwort (Signed)
11/10/2006

I just love the way you blend magic with Muggle-dom, namely:

The way Augusta lets the Creeveys into the Fidelius Charm without letting them know about it and

The boys' conversation about the reason why the Creeveys moved--a very smooth explanation.  



Author's Response: Thank you.  I do try to make things flow in my writing.



Chapter 5: Chapter 5
Reviewer: Spiderwort (Signed)
11/10/2006

Once again, you explain so naturally that Carla mistakes Colin's report on his play time for a wild imagination.

It took me bqck to my own childhood.  We might have played  Aurors and dark wizards too(tee-hee) when we weren't being cops and robbers--or cowboys and indians.

Thanks!



Author's Response:

Thank you.  Your ability to pick out subtley inserted comments amazes me.  I sadly, never played Aurors and dark wizards though I did get ropped into a few games of cops and robbers (which usually involved me being tied up) but that could be explained that my younger brother was the only boy on our street.  We did play magical games though, which reminds me... 



Author's Response:

Thank you.  Your ability to pick out subtley inserted comments amazes me.  I sadly, never played Aurors and dark wizards though I did get ropped into a few games of cops and robbers (which usually involved me being tied up) but that could be explained that my younger brother was the only boy on our street.  We did play magical games though, which reminds me... 




Chapter 6: Chapter 6
Reviewer: Spiderwort (Signed)
04/29/2007

Awww...I remember 'Snakes and Ladders'.  Colin sure is cute, but I thought I would have take you to task about how he couldn't possibly comprehend what Lily was telling him, but you fixed it by having his eyes glaze over in incomprehension.

Love it, as usual.

PS--I know Calamur's saying your chaps are too short.  but like 'em that way.  Lots easier to review, especially if you want to go back and hunt for quotes. 

I used to write that way too.  Then when I had to submit to sites that required 3000 words per, I just glued a couple of chaps together and put separators in between. 




Chapter 7: Chapter 7
Reviewer: Spiderwort (Signed)
05/06/2007

Awww...I remember 'Snakes and Ladders'.  Colin sure is cute.   I thought I would have take you to task about how he couldn't possibly comprehend what Lily was telling him, but you fixed it by having his eyes glaze over.  Perfect reaction.

Love it, as usual.

PS--I know people are saying your chapters are too short.  but I like 'em that way.  Lots easier to review (and beta), especially if you want to go back and hunt for quotes. 

I used to write that way too.  Then when I had to submit to sites that required 3000 words per, I just glued a couple of chaps together and put separators in between.




Chapter 7: Chapter 7
Reviewer: Spiderwort (Signed)
06/24/2007
Wow, never thought I'd have the opportunity to see a knock-down-drag-out bettween Lily and Augusta.  Great show.  LOL over James' look and the casting of the silencing spell.


Chapter 8: Chapter 8