Penname: ladylarna [Contact]
Real name: Larna
Member Since: 12/06/2005
Membership status: Member

Thanks for checking out my stuff, and I do hope you enjoy it. I'm currently inactive in the world of fanfic, but please check out my wizard rock project, Snidget, at myspace.com/goldensnidget.



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Categories: Orphan; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: None
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Chapters: 0 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 0; Read Count: 0; Completed: No

Updated: 12/31/1969; Published: 12/31/1969
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
09/29/2006

This is good. I just wish you hadn't put in the sentence, "Now, being so very old, I still remember what happened next." Your characterization was strong enough that, reading just the first few lines, I was like, "Oh, wow, she made her old!" It just screamed that tone at me, Luna looking back. So great job on that, and the perspective in general.

Just watch your grammar and you'll be fine (apart should be two separate words, but spellcheck never bothers to notice). Keep writing!



Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Yeah, I tend to have a few mistakes in my stuff. No surprise there. And that line I never liked much... perhaps I'll take it out. Thanks for the honesty, though! :D I do enjoy your reviews.



Chapter 1: Fantasy World
Fragmentary by Noldo [All Ages]
starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 2]

It's all in the stories, and the way we tell them. (Regulus gen, with mild AU.)



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Drabble
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 805; Read Count: 350; Completed: Yes

Updated: 09/30/2006; Published: 09/30/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
10/10/2006
Really interesting, a very twisty little drabble. Awesome writing style.


Chapter 1: Fragmentary

When a new student transfers to Hogwarts, a million secrets are hidden within the walls. So why has the castle suddenly come under threat? AND why does a certain blonde keep catching Draco Malfoy's eyes off-guard?

All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.
Please note: this fic contains adult themes, language, violence and torture scenes, as well as scenes of a sexual nature. Thus it is rated for Adult readers. Read at your own expense.


Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: General Fan Fiction
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Angst, Mystery
Warnings: Character Death, Dark Fiction, Sexual Situations, Strong Language, Strong Violence
Chapters: 5 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 42977; Read Count: 326; Completed: No

Updated: 10/12/2006; Published: 10/01/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
11/08/2006

Interesting story. I like your character, but I hate the situation you've put her in (the most believable character can become a Mary-Sue if you let her sit at the Head table and choose where she's Sorted). Draco flitted in and out of being OOC, but you just barely pulled him off.

In other words, just watch keeping your characterization thorough. Good writing, though, and I'll keep reading.




Chapter 1: The Journey Ahead
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
11/08/2006

It's a shame you've stuck your character in this plot - she's really likeable, and if you'd done things differently with her she could be a really good centerpiece to a story.

Unfortunately, the other characters suffer because you force Dylan in situations where she really doesn't belong. Harry has had the same friends for six years, he wouldn't just open up to people like that so quickly.

Your writing style is good, I just am not a fan of the direction of the story. Keep writing, though, you're good at it.




Chapter 2: At first sight
Old Moon by Stoicus [Mid Teens]
[Reviews - 3]
Post OotP - Lupin is coming to terms with the losses in his life and struggling to continue with his role within The Order. He has more trouble than he thought when a mysterious ailment plagues him and makes him a danger to those in the Order. Circumstances change, the war gets a lot worse. After a series of events, Lupin and Hermione find that all was not as it seemed nor whom it seemed to be, and they grow much closer, more than seemed possible.

Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Romance
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Action/Adventure, Angst, Mystery
Warnings: Alternate Universe, Mild Language, Mild Violence
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 5442; Read Count: 1032; Completed: No

Updated: 11/04/2006; Published: 10/03/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
10/28/2006
A good first chapter, can't wait to read the second. Keep it up!


Chapter 1: Stirrings of Trouble
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
10/28/2006
Interesting story so far, can't wait to see where it goes. Keep writing!


Chapter 2: In Old Wounds
Quiet Wishing by GryffinGal [Young Teens]
starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 2]

All he wants is somebody to care...



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Drabble
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Angst
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 220; Read Count: 452; Completed: Yes

Updated: 10/05/2006; Published: 10/05/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
11/08/2006
Wow, a very perceptive look at Harry at one of his most emo moments. Really nice, I liked it.


Chapter 1: Quiet Wishing

The Recommended Story for April 2003, a repeat Top 5 Selection, &  the #1 most read story on HPFF.com 2004-06. Novel length. Harry/OC (meet the Elemental!) R/H. Lots of heartbreak, joy and the infinite sadness. Starts midway through 6th yr and ends when the characters are 20. Think you know Draco? Think again.
Genres: Romance, Angst, AU   

Novel is complete, sequel is half finished as of 10/10/06



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Romance
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Angst
Warnings: Alcohol and/or Drug Abuse, Alternate Universe, Character Death, Mild Language, Mild Violence, Sexual Situations
Chapters: 12 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 96587; Read Count: 6115; Completed: No

Updated: 09/25/2007; Published: 10/10/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
10/28/2006

Interesting story, but your main character is quite the Mary Sue. Be careful to keep your characters realistic so that your story stays believable!

Keep writing.




Chapter 1: Harry Falls in Love

One last desperate letter tells the story of how humility can find even the most corrupt of souls when death is the only way out. Things always look different in the end, but it goes to show that it's never too late to redeem yourself, to show compassion without prejudice, and to be merciful.



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Drabble
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Drama, General
Warnings: Character Death, Dark Fiction
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 886; Read Count: 77; Completed: Yes

Updated: 10/15/2006; Published: 10/14/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
10/15/2006
This was well written and interesting, but I don't think it worked as a letter. Still, nice drabbling.


Chapter 1: My Slytherin Pride
Accepting Fate by Thoth [All Ages]
starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 6]

A one-shot in which a young Arabella Figg learns that you can find answers in most unlikely places.



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: General Fan Fiction, Pre-Canon
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: General
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1301; Read Count: 473; Completed: Yes

Updated: 10/20/2006; Published: 10/18/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
10/24/2006

A good little story, written so simply that it feels real. Poor Arabella... I think this is the first story I've seen examining this sort of situation, it's really sad and is making me think. Now I want to go write, take the idea of squibs and run with it... hmm, I just might.

Very nice oneshot, I really enjoyed reading it.



Author's Response: Thanks, glad you enjoyed it!



Chapter 1: Accepting Fate