Penname: ladylarna [Contact]
Real name: Larna
Member Since: 12/06/2005
Membership status: Member

Thanks for checking out my stuff, and I do hope you enjoy it. I'm currently inactive in the world of fanfic, but please check out my wizard rock project, Snidget, at myspace.com/goldensnidget.



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It was just an accident...



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Drabble
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 408; Read Count: 500; Completed: Yes

Updated: 09/10/2006; Published: 09/10/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
09/10/2006
Interesting little snapshot, but it felt a bit stiff. Try and keep the thoughts flowing naturally, and the emotions will bleed through a bit more. Nice adaptation of the prompt, though.


Chapter 1: Accidentally on Purpose
Accidental Magic by pottrluvr [Mid Teens]
starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3]

While waiting for his 17th birthday to arrive so he can leave the prison of the Dursleys', Harry learns new information about himself, his aunt, mother and Albus Dumbledore. The information he learns will greatly increase his power while at the same time change how he feels about the woman given the task of raising him.



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: General Fan Fiction
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Drama, General, Mystery
Warnings: Mild Violence
Chapters: 8 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 14075; Read Count: 6546; Completed: Yes

Updated: 01/31/2007; Published: 09/12/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
09/21/2006

An interesting first chapter, with fair characterizations (though you'll need to defend how Petunia gets from this characterization to the Petunia we see in PS/SS).

Keep writing!




Chapter 1: A New Perspective
Obliviate by VacantSkies [Mid Teens]
starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 26]

COMPLETE! Against his will, Harry's mind is erased to protect him... from himself. AU.



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Alternate Universe (AU), General Fan Fiction
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Action/Adventure, Angst, Drama, General, Mystery
Warnings: Alternate Universe, Character Death, Mild Language
Chapters: 11 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 42692; Read Count: 8739; Completed: Yes

Updated: 11/08/2006; Published: 09/12/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
09/14/2006
Interesting story so far; a bit confusing, but good. Keep writing!


Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Ginny needs help with an essay, an essay on Muggle magic. So she asks Hermione. Hermione asks Harry to help. That, and a trip to the Room of Requirement, gives our heroes a trip to remember!

Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Humor
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 3263; Read Count: 545; Completed: Yes

Updated: 09/14/2006; Published: 09/13/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
09/14/2006

I was reading this and started thinking it was familiar... and then I got to the bit on the Room and went, "Yup, read this before, made me laugh."

"We've been roommates for over six years and NOW I find out you're a Trekkie?" <---for the record, that's a brilliant line, hehe

Keep writing!



Author's Response: Thanks. Glad to give you a laugh. It was over at Phoenixsong. Was hoping to find a new audience here. I think I\'ll enter that line into the \"Best lines\" collection here. I got some pretty rabid begging for more of this. I haven\'t really thought much on it, but I can see a \"trapped in the Room of Requirement\" fic building on this. All ideas are welcome, but I\'m still not conviced on whether or not to continue. Thanks for reading.



Chapter 1: Running Amok

On his seventeenth birthday, Neville Longbottom receives an unexpected suprise when he goes to visit St. Mungos for his annual visit to his parents.



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: General Fan Fiction
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Drama
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1024; Read Count: 423; Completed: Yes

Updated: 10/07/2006; Published: 09/21/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
10/24/2006

It's an interesting concept, you just need to develop it more. Take some time to really build your story, to establish Neville's feelings towards his parents and the state they're in and his relationship with his grandmother. Once your reader understands the character, they'll be ready to handle your plot. Take your time with the buildup of all of that... there's no way Alice - a notable Order member - would just accept all of that information right away like that. Establish her as a character, too, and let the conflict between her and Neville build up to that great release.

It's a really great idea and start for a story. Keep writing!




Chapter 1: Chapter 1
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Categories: Orphan; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: None
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Chapters: 0 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 0; Read Count: 0; Completed: No

Updated: 12/31/1969; Published: 12/31/1969
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
09/27/2006

Interesting and emotionally charged. Just work on tightening up the grammar, and "Both of their lives ended within seconds, however," was a really awkward sentence.

Still, a good and original little ficlet, so nice job. :) The summary really pulled me in.



Author's Response: Thanks a ton, Larna. Oh, honest reviews, how I love you. *cough* Anyway. *laughs* Yeah, I find I have a habit for awkward sentences... ah well. Thanks again. :D



Chapter 1: Unlimited Apathy
[Reviews - 1]

In the middle of the night, while recovering in the Hospital Wing, Ron and Hermione discuss Harry, Sirius, what happened in the Department of Mysteries, and Ron's inability to understand females. A Missing Moment from OotP.



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: General Fan Fiction
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Drama, General
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 2417; Read Count: 389; Completed: Yes

Updated: 09/23/2006; Published: 09/22/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
10/10/2006
A wonderful missing moment. Your writing is really, really lovely, and this was a nice deep exploration of Ron and Hermione as truly dynamic characters. I really enjoyed reading it.


Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Irish Pride by Sarra Collan [All Ages]
starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 4]

There's a tribanibian in the well at the Quidditch World Cup, and Seamus gets roped into helping Luna Lovegood catch it, learning a little something about himself along the way. (A missing moment set during GoF)



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: General Fan Fiction
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Drama, General
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 3658; Read Count: 387; Completed: Yes

Updated: 09/23/2006; Published: 09/22/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
10/10/2006
Both characters are marvelously written, and you really bring them to life. The interaction was brilliant, and I love the ending there about how it changed Seamus. Awesome and brilliant writing.


Chapter 1: Chapter 1

She acts like summer and walks like rain, reminds me that there's a time for change. Luna observes Seamus and tells him that it's okay.



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Drabble
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 900; Read Count: 449; Completed: Yes

Updated: 09/23/2006; Published: 09/22/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
10/24/2006

"He calls her crazy, but says it with his sweet potato smile, so she knows this time he means no harm."

Hee, they make such an interesting pair. Lovely writing!




Chapter 1: Walks Like Rain
Harry by Aelan Greenleaf2 [Young Teens]
starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3]

“Why have you always insisted on calling me Harry?” In a world beyond the war, in a future that is nothing less than imperfect, a son confronts his father.



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: General Fan Fiction
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Angst
Warnings: Alcohol and/or Drug Abuse, Mild Language
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1025; Read Count: 510; Completed: Yes

Updated: 09/24/2006; Published: 09/23/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
10/01/2006

Oh, that's horribly depressing. Just... ouch.

Marvelously written, the emotions were intense. One comment, though: "releasing the breath he had realized he was holding." That's kind of awkward, 'he had realized.' Maybe hadn't, or maybe he had just realized.

Fantastic story, keep it up!




Chapter 1: Harry