Penname: ladylarna [Contact]
Real name: Larna
Member Since: 12/06/2005
Membership status: Member

Thanks for checking out my stuff, and I do hope you enjoy it. I'm currently inactive in the world of fanfic, but please check out my wizard rock project, Snidget, at myspace.com/goldensnidget.



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Late One Night by bratling [All Ages]
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A missing moment from CoS.



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Drabble
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: General
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 723; Read Count: 454; Completed: Yes

Updated: 07/30/2006; Published: 07/30/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
07/31/2006

Oh, that was awesome. A lovely missing moment, and you really captured ickle Ron.

Fantastic job on this.




Chapter 1: Chapter 1
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Lupin stands at the window of his home waiting for the moon to rise and the werewolf to take over.



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Drabble
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: None
Warnings: Sexual Situations
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1396; Read Count: 464; Completed: Yes

Updated: 08/02/2006; Published: 08/02/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
08/06/2006
An interesting look at Remus dealing with that. Could have used a bit more development, but it worked.


Chapter 1: A Night for Man and Beast
Obliviated by Ravenwood [All Ages]
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Harry, Ron, Hermione, and Malfoy find themselves in the office of a head-shrinker, a wizard psychiatrist, on the request of current Headmistress Minerva McGonagall. They're a bit surprised to find that their psychiatrist is more than a little familiar.

Written in response to Missy Mee's Parodies Challenge. 



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Humor
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: Gilderoy Lockhart, Wizard Psychiatrist
Word count: 2651; Read Count: 531; Completed: Yes

Updated: 08/03/2006; Published: 08/03/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
08/04/2006
Amusing. I'm not much for these parody styles, but it was good.

Author's Response: Well, thanks for the compliment nonetheless.



Chapter 1: Obliviated
Sherbet Lemon by Ravenwood [All Ages]
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Minerva McGonagall, new Headmistress of Hogwarts, feels somewhat oppressed by her new duties. After an evening's reflection, she finds help in from an unlikely source.

Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Character Study
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Angst, General
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: Portraits Of War
Word count: 1866; Read Count: 549; Completed: Yes

Updated: 08/06/2006; Published: 08/06/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
08/07/2006

This is the most attention I've ever seen given to her. This had serious depth. Loved:

Run away, Potter, she thought to herself. Get out of this mess while you can.

That, and:

"He's the only help he has."

Marvelous. Love the writing style. The last line felt lacking, though, and sort of ruined the rest of the flow. But, if it's supposed to be part of a series, maybe that's necessary. Still, in this context, the ending felt chopped short. But this is really good, fantastic writing.



Author's Response: Thank you. I've seen a good character sketch of McGonagall written by someone else--and I'm convinced it's better than mine--and if I could remember who wrote it, I'd tell you. Anyway, thanks for the good review. I see what you're saying about the ending, but I did it that way because I wanted to make it clear that the Headmistress is really on her own now...she's no longer the Deputy and she's no longer the Transfiguration teacher. She has to take hold of her duties and handle things responsibly. I wanted Dumbledore to give her one last bit of needed advice to let her know she's ready and that she can do it, no matter how lost she feels. So when she looks up at that moment, she sees he is asleep and will know that it's up to her now to continue where he left off in the education of wizarding children, and he can't be of help to her anymore.



Chapter 1: Sherbet Lemon

She is determined to show them that she is a capable witch too.



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: General Fan Fiction
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1056; Read Count: 408; Completed: Yes

Updated: 08/06/2006; Published: 08/06/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
08/07/2006

Interesting and unique. This piece has a nice flow to it, very natural.



Author's Response: Thanks for the review :) Chris



Chapter 1: I Will Show Them
Always Pure by Ravenwood [All Ages]
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Sixteen-year-old Sirius Black travels alone on a dark winter night with an enormous trunk fastened to his broomstick. He thinks back to what he's heard and learnt at home, struggling to come to terms with his family name. He makes his way to the Potters', where he intends to remain for as long as they'll let him.

Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: General Fan Fiction, Pre-Canon
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Angst, General
Warnings: Mild Language
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: Portraits Of War
Word count: 2576; Read Count: 458; Completed: Yes

Updated: 08/07/2006; Published: 08/07/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
08/07/2006

Yeah, so this is brilliant. Seriously. Love. Your writing style... reading this, you can just feel the depth. This oozes with personality, love love love.

"You know what they say, don't you?" James asked. "Always pure. I think once you're a Black, you're rather stuck that way."

Brilliant. Just marvelous. I adore your phrasing (though, at one point - I think discussing betrothal? - Sirius said something and you wrote "Sirius retorted" and 'retorted' didn't feel like the proper word).

But I love it. Keep it up, truly.



Author's Response: Thank you...I have a real soft spot for Sirius and I like to think about his roots--where he came from emotionally and the events in his young life that led him to be a Gryffindor instead of following the family standard. I think he's an amazing character with more depth than most of them she's written because he's got a rather explosive history. Anyway, this was an easy write...I guess it's how I always pictured his home life.



Chapter 1: Always Pure
Smile by GryffinGal [All Ages]
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Ginny's thoughts after Harry breaks up with her.



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: General Fan Fiction
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: General
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 2051; Read Count: 500; Completed: Yes

Updated: 08/14/2006; Published: 08/14/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
08/19/2006
Nice job on this. I loved the second to last line in particular. Your writing style is nice, really simple and clean-cut. Keep it up.


Chapter 1: One-shot
What would happen if instead of Harry Potter participating in the challenge for eternal glory, it was Tom Riddle instead? Watch as the heir of Slytherin find his way through rows, columns, tasks and obstacles to win the recognition he know he deserves.

Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: General Fan Fiction, Pre-Canon
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Action/Adventure, Angst
Warnings: Character Death
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 9530; Read Count: 357; Completed: Yes

Updated: 08/14/2006; Published: 08/14/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
11/08/2006

This was... different. You really pulled from all of the existing books, didn't you? Heh. Well, it was an interesting read, if a bit confusing (your characters/situations may have been a bit out of place, with regards to a canon timeline).

 



Author's Response: I wrote this a long time ago for a challenge that basically gave me the obstacles and told me I had to find a way to get through them. But I hope you enjoyed it anyway.



Chapter 1: The Maze
Home by malko050987 [Young Teens]
starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3]

The war is over, his battles have been fought, and he has to go home. But first, there is one last thing he wants to do.



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: General Fan Fiction
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: General
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 4094; Read Count: 480; Completed: Yes

Updated: 08/15/2006; Published: 08/15/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
09/30/2006

I wish he hadn't smirked at the end there, it ruined an otherwise perfect ending.

This is a really nice story, very deep and heartfelt. I just wish the dialogue was a bit more relaxed... I mean, I know people change in war, but I don't think hi's speaking style would become quite so rigid.

I did, though, really love these two lines: “I cast the Killing Curse at the cup,” he said suddenly, looking at the tomb bravely, with a hint of defiance, of rebellion in his eyes. After getting no reaction except for the hoot of an owl in the nearby forest, his shoulders sagged and he exhaled loudly.

 Those lines just completely captured Harry and everything about his character, so brilliant job on that.

Keep writing!



Author's Response: Thanks for the review :) I'm glad you like the fic. Those are my fave lines as well.

Unfortunately, I'm not a fan of dialogue. Something I'm trying to cure, but usually, the characters don't cooperate, and I prefer narration. 

Chris



Chapter 1: Home
starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 4]

Sometimes we learn unexpected things in strange and marvelous places without even trying.



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: General Fan Fiction
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Drama
Warnings: Mild Violence
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 3050; Read Count: 484; Completed: Yes

Updated: 08/21/2006; Published: 08/19/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
08/21/2006
Interesting. Your stories always manage to draw me in, despite the AU/OOC qualities of them. Great writing, and this was in interesting little piece.


Chapter 1: Chapter 1