Penname: ladylarna [Contact]
Real name: Larna
Member Since: 12/06/2005
Membership status: Member

Thanks for checking out my stuff, and I do hope you enjoy it. I'm currently inactive in the world of fanfic, but please check out my wizard rock project, Snidget, at myspace.com/goldensnidget.



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Bathroom Magic by Unickuta [Young Teens]
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Our favorite red-head needs to go to the bathroom at King's Cross Station, right before the Hogwarts Express leaves. Hilarity ensues as Ron discovers motion-sensor toilets, sinks, and hand-dryers!

 A snippet of Ron/Hermione at the end!



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Humor
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1190; Read Count: 503; Completed: Yes

Updated: 07/19/2006; Published: 07/18/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
10/28/2006

Heh, this was amusing. I finally read it because it was recc'd again in the chat, and I'm glad I did (I'll admit, your title kept me away).

Keep writing!



Author's Response:

Hehe, I'll bet you can find a fic with this exact same title on ff.net. I have a tendency of writing stuff that looks very, very wrong.




Chapter 1: Bathroom Magic

How is evil defined? Is it in our actions, our soul? Bartemius Crouch Jr.'s journey into the Dark Arts. It begins in his seventh year at Hogwarts, when he joins the Death Eaters. As Barty immerses himself in the Dark Arts, his friends slowly edge away. After his best friends abandon him and the girl he loves breaks his heart, his blind enthusiasm for the Dark Arts grows to the brink of madness. Barty begins to believe that 'good' and 'evil' are merely points-of-view.



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Dark Fiction, General Fan Fiction
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Drama
Warnings: Mild Violence
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 3016; Read Count: 355; Completed: No

Updated: 07/20/2006; Published: 07/20/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
08/06/2006

Reaaaaaaaaally interesting. Ha, fidelius on Hogwarts. The thought amuses.

This is marvelous, and I'm sorry it hasn't yet found an audience here. Great work!




Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Maybe by Buttamellow [Young Teens]
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Harry is leaving in the dead of night to face Voldemort on his own in order to remove any chance of having to saying goodbye to those he loves. He finds it difficult, however, when he is confronted by the person he had hoped the most to avoid- Ginny Weasley.

Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Romance
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Angst, Drama
Warnings: Alternate Universe
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1398; Read Count: 641; Completed: Yes

Updated: 07/21/2006; Published: 07/21/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
07/22/2006
Very well written and emotional. The almost detached way the dialogue comes across is extremely effective, and it gives this depth. Glad to see this. :)


Chapter 1: One-Shot

After a particular vicious time at the Dursleys', Harry makes a wish: to have a father figure. James Potter is granted another chance at life. Harry's future is changed forever. Set during our hero's fifth year.



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Alternate Universe (AU)
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Action/Adventure, Angst, Mystery
Warnings: Alternate Universe
Chapters: 8 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 20302; Read Count: 7875; Completed: No

Updated: 11/11/2006; Published: 07/23/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
07/24/2006

I've read this before, obviously, and I'm a fan. :) So rereading it will be a delight.

This chapter could use some polish, but beyond that it's great. :) Glad to see you posting!




Chapter 1: Prologue: A Wish
It's A Shame by Daisy Miller [Mid Teens]
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It is a truth universally acknowledged that... Draco Malfoy will always be a git.

Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Romance
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: General
Warnings: Mild Language
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 2979; Read Count: 1147; Completed: No

Updated: 08/02/2006; Published: 07/26/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
07/27/2006

An interesting start... not the kind of plot that interests me, but I had to leave you a review because one part was SO PERFECT and I loved it:

Hermione arched her left eyebrow. "What is, Malfoy?" she asked cautiously.

"That you’re so smart. Almost makes you respectable."

 

Love it. Awesome, awesome dialogue.



Author's Response: I'm glad you liked the dialogue, even though it's not the type of plot that generally interests you. Thank you for reading and commenting!



Chapter 1: Git
Hate by hpgirl7777 [All Ages]
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The line between love and hate is thinner than one might think.  But whatever name it's given, it hurts.

Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Romance
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Angst
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 2995; Read Count: 565; Completed: Yes

Updated: 07/27/2006; Published: 07/27/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
07/28/2006

A good piece that came together well. I didn't like that the first part was past tense - 'hated' - while the rest was 'hates.' While I can understand why you did it, you're writing all from that specific moment in time and so they should all be present.

Beyond that, it was good. A tad repetitive, but good overall and it was refreshing to see someone trying a different writing style.




Chapter 1: oneshot
That Moment by moony_ [Mid Teens]
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One shot, really quick read. R/Hr with a mention of H/G.

 

Ron and Hermione are grown up and casually having their lunch. They're single and refusing to face reality.

But what happens when fear gets the best of them?



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Drabble
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Fluff
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 796; Read Count: 420; Completed: Yes

Updated: 07/28/2006; Published: 07/28/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
07/28/2006

The concept of this was great, but I must say I felt rather cheated. This had the potential for a lot of depth, and if you sat and properly developed it, the story could make quite an engaging oneshot.

To me, the piece felt very awkward... I'm not sure if it's just your writing style or if it didn't get enough editing attention, but the lines felt very forced and some of the words seemed out of place. Lines like, "After a minute or two of quiet reflection in the depths of their anxieties, Ron and Hermione both concluded their next move." The words don't come together properly, so it halts the natural flow of the story.

I hope you don't look at this as a flame or anything of the sort; I feel your drabble has enormous potential to be something more. If you ever decide to develop it further and work on it with a few betas (both steps I highly encourage), let me know if you post another version of this. It's a really great concept, a sweet idea indeed that just needs a little polish.

Take care and keep writing!



Author's Response: Hellooo- I just felt like defending my honor... well, not really, but just explaining my fan fic a little. I\'m sorry you felt sort of cheated :\\ That was definately not intended. This story was supposed to be only a page, really, since it started out as a quick scene I came up with. There wasn\'t supposed to be depth or any sort of story line at all (hehe). As for the awkward writing, I can\'t do much about that because that\'s just how the structure was formed. I wanted to write this story in a very straight forward kind of way- I guess it ended up being a little dry. Anyways... this was a drabble story for a reason. :) It was supposed to be a snapshot into their boring lives without Voldemort or school or people... just them--- and then a random proposal. I don\'t think I really want to redo the entire thing and come up with better descriptions or try to develop them further... It was a quickie and I wanted to share my cute little idea. BUT! I promise that if I want to change something and decide to go full out and really work on it-- I\'ll make sure you\'ll hear of it first :D Thank you soooo much for feedback- Sorry that I\'m a loser and actually responded, but I just like having people know where I\'m coming from and maybe not concluding to the wrong idea. I love comments like these because they make me think why the hell I wrote the fic the way I did and whatnot. Keep commenting, the fan fiction world needs people like you & I\'ll keep writing, I promise!



Chapter 1: Very Grown Up
What a Life we Live by jayley [Mid Teens]
starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 2]

AU. Sirius searches far and wide for Harry while his twin Hunter, and the believed Boy Who Lived is being 'guarded' by the Ministry after the attack on Godric's Hollow. Sirius won't stop until he finds Harry, and when he finally does, the wizarding world will be in for a surprise!



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Alternate Universe (AU)
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Drama
Warnings: Alternate Universe
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1574; Read Count: 6242; Completed: No

Updated: 07/28/2006; Published: 07/28/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
08/06/2006
Interesting. Don't be afraid to take time and develop your settings and plot... this could have easily been four chapters, had you offered a bit more backstory and expanded to establish characters and the like. Still, a good start!


Chapter 1: Chapter 1- Do I get to call you Daddy now?
Hogwarts Blues by Konrad [All Ages]
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There are a lot of differences in the magical world, but one of the greatest is that of people who can perform high definition magic by means of music and those who can't. In this fic you'll follow Neville in his sixth year as he becomes a professional blues artist. Starring Lightnin' Albus, Ginny on the drums, The Artist Formerly Known As Riddle and the famous ex-boysband "The Death Eaters".

Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Humor
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 3453; Read Count: 2425; Completed: No

Updated: 08/04/2006; Published: 07/29/2006
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
08/19/2006
Ah! I've been beaten to this idea, the general Hogwarts School of Rock kind of deal. Amusing, if a bit OOC (character dialogue seems off).

Author's Response: Hehe, well I'm glad I was first then. I know it's slightly OOC, and there are a few contradictions, but the next chapter should be better and I'm going for a revised version of the current chapters as well.



Chapter 1: That Ain't It
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Categories: Orphan; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: None
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Chapters: 0 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 0; Read Count: 0; Completed: No

Updated: 12/31/1969; Published: 12/31/1969
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
08/06/2006
Ahahaha! I love it. Marvelous songfic.


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