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A new Defense Against the Dark Arts professor arrives at Hogwarts. In her first couple weeks, she manages to ruffle the feathers of many of the faculty, particularily Potions master Severus Snape. Takes place after Goblet of Fire.



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Alternate Universe (AU)
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Drama, General
Warnings: Alternate Universe, Mild Language, Mild Violence
Chapters: 20 Table of Contents Series: The Great Snape-Deveroux Grudge Match
Word count: 150005; Read Count: 18883; Completed: Yes

Updated: 01/21/2006; Published: 01/04/2006
Reviewer: Ghostlymagic (Signed)
07/04/2009

Chapter 4. 3b Review

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Chapter 4: 3b Memories and Meetings
Reviewer: Ghostlymagic (Signed)
07/04/2009

Another good chapter! I found it satisfying in this one the way that Deveroux finally got her own back and showed what she could do.




Chapter 5: 4a. Peace Preservation
Reviewer: Ghostlymagic (Signed)
07/08/2009

Another good chapter! Just one characterization thing:

"That's Corwin, dear little, impish guy," Flitwick said as he took the picture back and beamed at the grinning, waving boy. "My oldest granddaughter Padelia's son. He has his mother's personality, and his father's looks. So, what of your family? Your parents work in the legal field, right? Do you have any brothers and sisters?"

I doubt Flitwick would say 'guy' or 'right?'. I personally would put boy for guy and yes for right.



Author's Response:

Thank you for your reviews! You bring up some good points here -- thanks!




Chapter 6: 4b. Peace Preservation
Reviewer: Ghostlymagic (Signed)
07/12/2009

It was good to break the darkness of several past chapters with more of the 'Snape-Deveroux Grudge Match'. A funny chapter for the most part, except for the vengeance scene.




Chapter 10: 8. Sic Simper Sorex
Reviewer: Ghostlymagic (Signed)
07/13/2009

I'm gripped! I nearly didn't write this review because I want to keep reading so much!!! A very good ending to the chapter...




Chapter 11: 9. Passing Judgement

After the disasterous mort-de-kai, Snape threatens to leave Hogwarts. There is only one person who may be able to convince him to stay....



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Alternate Universe (AU)
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Drama, General
Warnings: Alternate Universe, Mild Language, Mild Violence
Chapters: 32 Table of Contents Series: The Great Snape-Deveroux Grudge Match
Word count: 244381; Read Count: 22393; Completed: Yes

Updated: 02/14/2006; Published: 01/22/2006
Reviewer: Ghostlymagic (Signed)
09/12/2009

Another good, eerie chapter, just one mistake that I noticed.

'and the war may already lost before it has begun'. I think you meant: 'and the war may already be lost before it has begun'.




Chapter 27: 36b. If I Fall
Reviewer: Ghostlymagic (Signed)
09/18/2009

I HAVE TO KEEP READING !!! Amazing and unbelievable last chapters, brilliantly written, I was almost crying.




Chapter 32: 39b. Demon of the Night
Reviewer: Ghostlymagic (Signed)
08/29/2009

A well written chapter. I completely lost myself in it at the start and it was a shock when I came out of it and was sitting in my own house. Well done.




Chapter 13: 25b. The Many Useful Properties of Unicorns
Reviewer: Ghostlymagic (Signed)
08/29/2009

I love the ending, it's mysterious and makes me want to keep reading. But when you're using dialogue you hardly ever use contractions. Most teenagers don't say everything in full, as in "Hello, I am Ron, do not enter that room." Rather they'd say "Hi, I'm Ron, don't enter that room.




Chapter 14: 26a. Concerning Monsters
Reviewer: Ghostlymagic (Signed)
08/29/2009

I love the start! Funny and exciting, especially the first line. Another contractions issue. I don't think even Hermione would say 'but you are insane'. Instead she'd say 'but you're insane'. And the end is mysterious again. My guess is that it's Severus.




Chapter 17: 28. Written in the Stars