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Not having any experience teaching, Gilderoy Lockhart was only worried about looking good for his students during class. Making sure they bought all of his books, he had put all of them on the booklist for his class.

Join in the laughter, as Gilderoy tackles his hardest mission to date… teaching children how to defend themselves.



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: Other Canon Character; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Humor
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 2537; Read Count: 422; Completed: Yes

Updated: 03/03/2009; Published: 03/03/2009
Reviewer: Gmariam (Signed)
05/29/2009

Hi Wendy! This was very cute! Congrats on winning the challenge (isn't it fun to win?) I really liked all the little touches you added to Lockhart's character. There were also some great, funny lines! I think the best one has to be the last, considering what happens to him at the end of the year. I was wondering what the section from CoS might have read like if you had kept the dialogue but framed it from Lockhart's point of view and not Harry's; I can see why you didn't want to mess with the master's words, though, and you set it up perfectly. Nice job! ~Gina :)



Author's Response:

Thanks so much, Gina! I had a blast writing this one. It's not often that I dip into the humour section, but I thought this one turned out fairly well. I had thought of taking the dialogue and doing it from his persective, but I was so afraid of messing it up that I left it as is. I'm so glad you liked this and thanks again for the lovely review. *hugs*




Chapter 1: Gilderoy Lockhart’s Guide to Teaching

 

When Lily Potter finds herself sitting up for yet another night with her infant son, she decides that it’s about time for her to resort to a little bit of DIY potion-making in order to ensure her family finally gets a good night’s sleep.

 

It has been a long time though since she last made a potion and for good reason…

 



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: Harry Potter, James Potter; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Character Study
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Fluff, General
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1706; Read Count: 293; Completed: Yes

Updated: 03/14/2009; Published: 03/14/2009
Reviewer: Gmariam (Signed)
03/14/2009

Great description of the potion making process! Some very nice touches, especially with the statue and the tears. And I had a feeling Harry would fall asleep before she was finished! Nice job. :)




Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Viridis by h_vic [Young Teens]
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Many difficult things have been asked of Severus Snape over the years, and perhaps this latest one ought not to have been the hardest. But yet, he knew that, just beyond the gargoyle, he would be forced to confront the most difficult test he'd ever known: facing the man he killed.



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: Albus Dumbledore, Severus Snape; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Character Study
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Angst, Drama
Warnings: Character Death
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1915; Read Count: 415; Completed: Yes

Updated: 03/14/2009; Published: 03/14/2009
Reviewer: Gmariam (Signed)
03/14/2009

That was quite good! You have a very natural, fluid style of writing and did a wonderful job with these two characters and their relationship. Nice job! :)




Chapter 1: Chapter 1
It's been a few weeks since Harry broke it off with Ginny. He says it's for the best... but his actions say different. Pre-DH

Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: Ginny Weasley, Harry Potter, Hermione Granger, Ron Weasley; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Alternate Universe (AU), Romance
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Fluff
Warnings: Alternate Universe
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 2764; Read Count: 561; Completed: Yes

Updated: 04/28/2009; Published: 04/28/2009
Reviewer: Gmariam (Signed)
04/28/2009

Nicely written! That was very cute. I especially liked how the conversation went back and forth for a while, was that the 'new style' you were trying out? I wonder how DH would have been different if Harry and Ginny had stayed together after all. Good job! ~Gina :)



Author's Response: Yeah, I wasn't sure how to go back and forth between them but that's the feeling I wanted. Hopefully I conveyed it well enough! Thank you for the kind review!



Chapter 1: The Power of a Kiss
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Neville pops into the Leaky Cauldron and leaves with much more.



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: Hannah Abbott, Neville Longbottom; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: General Fan Fiction, Post-Canon, Romance
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: None
Warnings: Book Seven Spoilers
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1013; Read Count: 45; Completed: Yes

Updated: 07/14/2009; Published: 07/13/2009
Reviewer: Gmariam (Signed)
07/18/2009

Very nice! I loved reading about a character not always written about, and about something we know happened only we didn't get to read it in the book. Neville was very in character - emboldened by the firewhiskey but still nervous and uncertain. It was sweet - nice job! ~Gina :)



Author's Response:

Thank you.  I'm glad that you enjoyed this story.  I don't write a lot of Neville despite that I like him and Hannah a lot.




Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Follow The Sun by Nieriel Raina [Young Teens]
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UNDYING FRIENDSHIP SERIES: Legolas faces the darkest night of his life – and the death of a close friend.
2009 Middle-earth Fanfiction Awards Nominee

Categories: Lord of the Rings; Characters: Aragorn II, Eldarion, Legolas Greenleaf; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Character Study
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Angst, Drama
Warnings: Character Death
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1337; Read Count: 464; Completed: Yes

Updated: 07/25/2009; Published: 07/25/2009
Reviewer: Gmariam (Signed)
07/25/2009

That was very beautiful! Very well-written, especially Legolas. I enjoyed reading something set so far in the future, even though it was so sad. Wonderful job! ~Gina :)



Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed it!



Chapter 1: Follow The Sun
UNDYING FRIENDSHIP SERIES: When Sam and Rosie visit Minas Tirith with Elanor in the year 21 of the Fourth Age, they also bring four-year-old, Ruby. But Ruby disappears and it's up to a certain elf to find the child who has longed to meet him. Slightly AU.
2009 Middle-earth Fanfiction Awards Nominee

Categories: Lord of the Rings; Characters: Arwen, Legolas Greenleaf, Other Canon Hobbits, Rosie (Cotton) Gamgee, Sam (Samwise) Gamgee; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Character Study, Humor, Post-Canon
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Fluff, General
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1451; Read Count: 401; Completed: Yes

Updated: 07/25/2009; Published: 07/25/2009
Reviewer: Gmariam (Signed)
07/26/2009

That was absolutely adorable! I loved it. I could picture the entire scene in my mind's eye, from Legolas trying to hold back a grin to his pretend frowns to him bounding over the wall to beat Ruby to the garden. It was just so sweet. And I especially liked that at the end Ruby wasn't embarassed, but threw her arms around Legolas again. So sweet. Wonderful writing, I hope you share more of your Legolas stories here! ~Gina :)



Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so thrilled you enjoyed it! I am planning to slowly add my work here, but it's a lot, and with the need for each story to pass approval with the mods, it may take some time to get it all over here. :)



Chapter 1: A Trickle of Green Ribbon
UNDYING FRIENDSHIP SERIES: "…In the days of June, sudden war came upon us out of Mordor, and we were swept away." A furthering of Boromir's account of the attack on Osgiliath at the Council of Elrond.

Categories: Lord of the Rings; Characters: Boromir (son of DenethorII), Faramir son of Denethor, Other Canon Men of Middle-earth; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Character Study, General Fan Fiction
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Action/Adventure, Angst, Drama
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1896; Read Count: 384; Completed: Yes

Updated: 07/26/2009; Published: 07/25/2009
Reviewer: Gmariam (Signed)
07/26/2009

Fantastic! I loved how you took Boromir's words to the Council and crafted a story from them - it was perfect to start and end the piece with the direct quotation from the book. I love reading 'missing moments' like this in the Potterverse and now I can read them in Middle earth!

I am particularly impressed by your blend of styles: a bit of your own, a bit of Tolkien. Most of it reads more modern and original, until you throw in a line that Tolkien could have written himself just to remind us that Middle earth isn't a modern place, after all. I appreciate that: I have not read mucht ME fanfic (actually, yours might be some of the first!), but I think I prefer stories that are closer to his style than not. And having written one ME story, I know it's hard!!

The other thing that is just fantastic about this story is the descriptive language: you not only describe things beautifully, but you describe them in comparison to other things in Middle earth ("...like a freezing gale blasting down from Mindolluin in Winter") You obviously know your Tolkien and it lends a real verisimilitude to your writing, not to mention great beauty and fluidity.

I hope my gushing made sense. I am really enjoying your writing! One question: what is your Undying Friendship series? The first two stories were about Legolas and this one is about Boromir - how are they all connected?

Wonderful job!
~Gina :)



Author's Response: Thank you for the lovely (and long!) review! I am honored that you enjoyed it so much. I'm glad the small nuances are finally coming through in my writing. It's taken me three years of beating my head against a wall to get there. :)

The Undying Friendship series is my main series and most canon compliant series. Odds are most things I write fall into this one. Many are stand alones and simply are part of the series due to the nature of the story (canon compliant and based on friendship or family), though I might build on them at a later time. The shorter ficlets are generally character studies that help me work out the characterizations of certain characters. One example would be my Heart of the Elvenking series, a sub series about Thranduil and based loosely in the Undying Friendship Series (some elements may be AU to the UFS). I currently have over 65 stories in the series, ranging from drabbles and short ficlets (posted in collections) to long one shots to novel length, multi-chaptered tales. It's got humor, angst, drama, family, friendship, gap filler, romance...you name it! Set from the first through the fourth ages, though most are set in the Third Age. Many stories are interconnected or sequels to others. I have several different series that are NOT related, and I have some one shots that are stand alones and are NOT part of the UFS. IT's complicated. I can't write in just one universe. When I explore characters, I want to explore every possibility. So in the UFS, Legolas is the youngest of five siblings (one died in the Last Alliance long before his birth). He is single and not really interested in marrying, though he eventually weds in Aman. In the UFS, Thranduil's wife was also killed when Legolas was a young adolescent. Whereas in my Greenwood Prince Series, Legolas marries young, his mother is alive and he only has one brother. In another series, I have written him as an only child. I have an overactive imagination, what can I say! LOL!

With this short on Boromir, it is based on the love between the brothers and there is another short ficlet with these two that is too short to be posted here as it's only a couple hundred words. But I might explore it further and link it more in time. The OCs that escape with them for instance, might come back into later stories as well. This series just continues to build on itself. You'll see it more as I post more and more of my work here. The keystone story is my first, Never Again, but it is in dire need of editing before I put it up here. You'll find most of the tale center on the friendship of the Three Hunters and especially Legolas and Gimli, but I also have a great respect for Faramir/Eowyn and Eomer/Lothiriel. I've also tied it into the First age at one point with a multi-age fic. O.o Dang, sometimes it blows me away how BIG this has gotten! Hope that helps explain. I can get carried away with my babbling. :) I'm trying to post the most recent stories that are in least need of editing first.

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!



Chapter 1: A Dark Shadow Under The Moon
UNDYING FRIENDSHIP SERIES: In Lothlórien, Arwen overhears a group of ellyn speaking and tries to make sense of their conversation.

Categories: Lord of the Rings; Characters: Arwen, Elladanand, Elrohir, Erestor, Glorfindel, Haldir (Third Age), Orophin, Rúmil (Haldir's Brother); Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Character Study, Humor
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1171; Read Count: 618; Completed: Yes

Updated: 07/27/2009; Published: 07/27/2009
Reviewer: Gmariam (Signed)
07/27/2009

The title intrigued me, especially after I read your note (and learned what 'ellyn' meant.) Very cute! The elves conversation was very light-hearted and natural and Arwen's reactions rather humorous. She did seem a bit. . . prudish, perhaps, but I'll be keeping an eye out for her in your other stories to see if she loosens up a bit as she matures. ;) Great work! ~Gina



Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed it! Arwen is indeed a bit prudish here, but she is very young, as far as elves go. ;) Sadly, most of my character study work featuring her is not permissible at this site as it does not meet the 1000 word chapter requirement. The way I post those tales is not conducive to posting them to the drabble board, but I can point you to where they are posted. You can find them at fanfiction dot net or lotrfanfiction dot net under the same pen name and they are in the collection entitled Find the Sun. There are two, I think: Treasured Moments and Wicked. The latter will show you just how UNprudish she has become by the time she's married Aragorn. :) Thanks again for reading! ~ NiRi



Chapter 1: The Strange Conversations Habits of Ellyn

This is two ficlets combined to make the word count. Both are about Arwen and Aragorn's marriage.

Men are Weak - Elrond's thoughts about Arwen's future with Estel.

A Beggar of Distinction - Aragorn has an interesting meeting at his wedding that leaves him speechless. For Aragorn Angst group prompt - 'Speechless' and Birthday gift for Gwynnyd 



Categories: Lord of the Rings; Characters: Aragorn II, Arwen, Elrond; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: General Fan Fiction
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Drama
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1275; Read Count: 477; Completed: Yes

Updated: 07/27/2009; Published: 07/27/2009
Reviewer: Gmariam (Signed)
07/27/2009

Oooh, nice! I admit I had to look up Maglor since it's been ages since I read The Silmarillion. But that was a wonderful touch - a bittersweet twist, well done!

The first ficlet was very good as well - you captured Elrond's voice in first person extremely well. I particularly liked the line: "yet it will be love that will defeat me" It's just so. . . Elvish! Brilliant, too. One question: could the Elves communicate in thought in Tolkien's writing, or is that from the movies? Hm, that makes me think of another question I might just have to toss your way over on the forums. . . ;)

Very nice, I can't wait to read your piece on Feanor when I come back from vacation! ~Gina :)



Author's Response:

Thanks so much for your review :) Yes, its book canon that elves can communicate mentally. Its called Osanwe-kenta. Here's a link where Tolkien discusses it. http://www.alissonrveldhuis.com/Tolkien_Osanwe_kenta.html I don't use it very much in my writing because I don't think its as easily done as some people think it is. In Paradox (my WIP) Laureanna - the main OFC - only has a connection to her loved ones through dreams and half the time they make no sense to her. But Elrond explains to her that he and Galadriel can only see what Eru (Tolkien's version of God) allows them to see so they cannot read minds unless it is Eru's intervention. And his children can at times shut him out and he's aware they shut him out so its mainly something between very powerful elves and those who are closest to each other's hearts. That's all just my opinion and way of treating it in fanfiction - not canon. I don't want my elves to be able to read everyone's mind all the time because how intrusive that would be! lol




Chapter 1: Chapter 1