Real name: Gmariam
Member Since: 03/12/2009
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'Twas Nighttime At Hogwarts and the Mauraders' have some mischief to manage...
Written in the style of "'Twas the Night Before Christmas", although doesn't have to take place at Christmas.
That was great! I wrote a parody of 'Twas the Night Before Christmas myself a few years ago so I know it's tricky to keep the rhyme and the rhythm and still tell a story. This was well done. The story was a perfect choice and I laughed as I was reading it. Wonderful job, I'm glad it was the Story of the Moment so I could read it! ~Gina :)
I love these pinnacle James/Lily moments - that was a cute one! Very nice job with all that dialogue. :) ~Gina :)
One shot, really quick read. R/Hr with a mention of H/G.
Ron and Hermione are grown up and casually having their lunch. They're single and refusing to face reality.
But what happens when fear gets the best of them?
That was very cute! I was wondering if there was going to be any dialogue, so when Ron said "Will you marry me?" out of the blue, it was a lovely surprise! A very unique little drabble - nice job! ~Gina :)
James and Lily with their son and the part that the Marauder's played in Harry's life.
This is a great subject for a poem, especially this form of poem. I like how it tells a story. With DH complete you could totally expand it. I missed a few beats here and there but thought you did a nice job, especially with the end. I wish someone had reviewed it much earlier than this! ~Gina :)
Thank you so much for the review. I am glad that you liked the poem. I wrote it for a contest on another site and was limited in the number of words that I could write. I would like to expand on it one of these days when I can get the time. Any ideas or suggestions are appreciated. Thank you again...~Dawn~
Harry Potter finishes his seventh glass of Firewhisky... where does the evening take him?
I love clicking on something so good as the Story of the Moment! The opening paragraphs were FANTASTIC! What a great introduction, very well written. The repetition in particular makes it very effective.
You painted a very bleak picture of the final battle. I was surprised to see Ron kill Draco Malfoy with his bare hands! Yikes! I really felt for Hermione, though. And of course for Harry. Maybe it's because we've now seen how it ends, but I could never see Harry committing suicide; you wrote it well, though, and made it very believable and sad.
What I found most interesting was that even though he took his life, he still got to see his friends and loved ones in the afterlife. That was a beautiful scene, and a lovely reunion with Ginny. Wonderful job! ~Gina :)
Hermione, Ron, Hermione and Ginny have a message for everyone.
That is very cute! I love Ron's plea the most, since he does get stuck watching Hermione run off with just about everyone but him! Nice job, it was fun to read. ~Gina :)
Oh, that was sweet! What a great job at intermixing the Muggle world with the magical world. Great job with both characters as well! ~Gina :)
I had to repost this cause I forgot half the story last time!!
Harry tries to be perfect....
Wow, that was really powerful! Great job with using the second person point of view, and in present tense, too! It makes it so much more intense, to be experiencing what Harry is experiencing. Poor Harry. You did a good job detailing what was happening to him, it's a very emotional piece. I would only mention that the ending seemed a bit abrupt - another sentence or two might wrap it up a bit more, especially if you connected it to something from the first paragraph. Otherwise, great job! ~Gina :)
Very nice! I've read this scene before, and even written it myself, and I enjoyed reading yours. The teasing at the end was good, I think that there would be a lot of laughter in their relationship, starting from the beginning. Good job! ~Gina :)
Christmas Eve brings candles, guilt and memories for Severus Snape.
Wonderful job! You write with such beautiful language and emotion. I loved how you examined Snape's feelings through these flashbacks; my only suggestion would be to make the flashbacks longer and really get more into the scenes with Mary, Charity, and even Dumbledore, since you wrote them so well I wanted to read more. But I know that probably wasn't your intent: the short vignettes worked nicely too. The candles tying everything together were fantastic. You really understand this character and write very well! ~Gina :)