Penname: Wolfs_Scream [Contact]
Real name: David Wolfskill
Member Since: 08/18/2005
Membership status: Member

Not creative enough to be an author; I can help with proofreading and the like, though. The Web site above has nothing about Harry Potter. Buried in some pages on the site you might find hints as to the origin of the penname, but that's about the extent of the relevance.

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What if the fates that let Harry's parents live the night he got his scar, also gave him a younger sister and let him befriend Ron Weasley earlier? What would be different?

Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Alternate Universe (AU), General Fan Fiction
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama, Fluff
Warnings: Alternate Universe, Mild Language, Mild Violence, Sexual Situations
Chapters: 59 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 223354; Read Count: 118179; Completed: Yes

Updated: 12/26/2006; Published: 08/23/2005
Reviewer: Wolfs_Scream (Signed)
Very interesting premise & start. (Have you read whydoyouneedtonkow's "Living with Danger" over on It's a rather different AU, but very well-written.) Hmmm... wonder -- since Bell was (intended to have been) taken into custody, perhaps Frank & Alice will be OK, too? Excellent start!

Chapter 1: Prologue: Where it all began
Reviewer: Wolfs_Scream (Signed)
Good continuation -- though I'd think that with James being Head of the Aurors, and Frank & Alice being Aurors, and Harry and Neville being born on the same day, that the Potters and Longbottoms would know each other, and would likely be friends. I rather hope we'll get some flashbacks to Harry's pre-Hogwarts years, though I expect that there will be enough material with that. Well done! And thanks for the care you take with proofreading; that makes reading your story much more enjoyable.

Chapter 2: First Time to Hogwarts
Reviewer: Wolfs_Scream (Signed)
Quite well done! (One little capitalization quibble: when a word is used as a direct address (i.e., in lieu of the person's name), such as "Son" (as in the case with the letter that accompanied Harry's broom), I believe it should be capitalized.) Good stuff! :-)

Author's Response: Thanks for your words of praise for the three chapters. James does know the Longbottoms but I reasoned that starting out as friends with the Weasleys , Harry has little time for other people. Don't worry, Harry and Neville will become good friends at Hogwarts, especially since Neville is more confident and less shy. Now that I think about it, your comment on the capitalization thing is valid, Thanks.

Chapter 3: Strange Goingson
Reviewer: Wolfs_Scream (Signed)
Well done! I got a chuckle out of the comments after the pick-up Quidditch game. :-) Ah, good -- as I was starting to read this chapter (and re-establishing context), I was wondering about the Dursleys; I'm glad you address that issue (though I expect it may pop up again in the future).

Chapter 4: Christmas at Potter Manor
Reviewer: Wolfs_Scream (Signed)
Excellent! Aren't little sisters just so *special*? (I have a couple; they're OK ... now. :-})

Chapter 5: The Marauders Return and Another Quidditch Match
Reviewer: Wolfs_Scream (Signed)
Hmmm... Lily's Howler seemed to lose some steam just a short way into it. Probably just as well, for Harry's sake. :-) Well done!

Author's Response: Glad you like the story so far. Just wait til the little sisters get to Hogwarts. About Lily's howler, I reasoned that James would be able to calm Lily down while Lily can curb James' mischievous nature.

Chapter 6: More mysteries at Hogwarts
Reviewer: Wolfs_Scream (Signed)
Ah, yes: well done! Yeah, I can see how little sisters might react less-than-pleasantly to the expressed thought that someone would be "able to control" them. And I see that the Longbottom & Potter families are getting to know each other better. :-)

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it. You'll see Neville more involved with the trio in the future.

Chapter 7: After Saving the Stone
Reviewer: Wolfs_Scream (Signed)
Very nice. The dialogue between Harry & Rose had a very believable tenor -- I've had some experience having a little sister myself (since 1960). Saw your response to the other reviewer's comments on the previous chapter. And no, I don't mind if Harry & Ginny get together a bit sooner in this storyline than in canon. :-)

Chapter 8: Summer talks
Reviewer: Wolfs_Scream (Signed)
Interesting twists, especially thanks to Rose's presence. I rather expect that effect to become more pronounced over time, somehow. I am a little surprised that Harry fell for Rose's jackstone booby trap -- he's had plenty of time to know how her mind works, after all. Let's see ... next chapter should see a train journey, I think. Oh: wonder if Harry & Ron will see their sisters' sortings this time... should be interesting!

Author's Response: Well, she still occasionally surprises him. You're right about what's in the next chapter, in general. There will be an interesting twist to the original. Oh, they will witness their sisters' sorting.

Chapter 9: Summer birthdays and a trip to Diagon Alley
Reviewer: Wolfs_Scream (Signed)
Heh -- at least in this version, Harry & Ron get to see Ginny's (& Rose's) Sorting. :-) Ginny's "accidental" hug of Harry was rather interesting. Wonder who (if anyone) really believes it was accidental? Good job; I look forward to the next chapter!

Chapter 10: Back to Hogwarts