Penname: Desslok [Contact]
Real name: Jim Ghilloni
Member Since: 08/06/2005
Membership status: Member

I am a 36yo man, married, with 2 daughters (7 and 5).

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Categories: Orphan; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: None
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Chapters: 0 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 0; Read Count: 0; Completed: No

Updated: 12/31/1969; Published: 12/31/1969
Reviewer: Desslok (Signed)
08/23/2005
Ok, so when I read the first chapter, I didn't like this story. Harry was just soooo harsh with poor Ginny that it pissed me off. Well, I'm glad I got over it and continued reading, cause this is a great story! I really enjoy your characterizations and can't wait to see the rest!!!

Author's Response: I appreciate your review. I did answer your review before, but I had just woken up and added my response as a review. Sheesh. Anyway, I'm glad you gave the story a second chance. I wrote the Harry from the first chapter based on Angry!Harry from OotP. I know now because of HBP that I was a bit off the mark, but Angry!Harry is integral to the story as he is. Thanks for reviewing!!!



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Ancient Magic by kjpzak [Young Teens]
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Harry and Ginny are destined to have a love that endures. He Who Must Not be Named certainly thinks so. Could their love be the key to fulfilling one of his greatest wishes?



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: General Fan Fiction
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Drama, Fluff
Warnings: Mild Violence
Chapters: 12 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 38111; Read Count: 14909; Completed: Yes

Updated: 05/04/2005; Published: 05/04/2005
Reviewer: Desslok (Signed)
08/29/2005
Incredible story. Just perfect! I can't say enough about how great this is. (Constructive feedback, I know.) I would say more, but I must go read the sequel!!!!

Author's Response: LOL - I love any feedback! I'm thrilled you enjoyed it! Hope you like the sequel just as much!



Chapter 12: Destiny
Different by YelloWitchGrl [Mid Teens]
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One Shot! Ginny becomes disgusted with beauty and how many girls react to it. Her reactions and interactions with Harry. That does not even sum it up... sigh. POST OOTP

Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Romance
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Angst, Fluff, General
Warnings: Alternate Universe, Mild Language
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 2966; Read Count: 553; Completed: Yes

Updated: 05/11/2005; Published: 05/11/2005
Reviewer: Desslok (Signed)
08/09/2005
This is a very scary story, as I have two daughters who undoubetdly will go through this crap when they are older. Excellent and fun. I love the way you depict Harry here: so intense and honest.

Author's Response: Oh yes (mind you I'm in the state I'm in while I'm replying and we're in the chat room) but your daughters will go through that, so good luck. If you are a praying man, start now!! :-)



Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Different
If Only... by padfootwillreturn [Young Teens]
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When one talks about Sirius's death, they usually feel sorry for Harry. They don't realize that he isn't the only one who recieved Sirius's death hard. Remus Lupin, is hurt beyond imaginable. He trys to hold it in, and not show emotion, but inside he's sad, he find his life a nightmarE. He's alone in this world...Remus reflects on old childhood memories.

Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Character Study
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Angst
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1533; Read Count: 516; Completed: Yes

Updated: 05/28/2005; Published: 05/28/2005
Reviewer: Desslok (Signed)
09/28/2005
Ironically, the only parts of this story that I really didn't enjoy or think flowed well with the rest were the ones you explained that you had drawn from the inspiration of other people's stuff. I love the beginnning and the end. I love the idea of Remus remembering things about his relationship with Sirius, but the journal in the middle with the prank obsession and the discussion of James seems a bit out of place. If you lifted this entirely and filled the space with a few more memories of Sirius and Remus, maybe one or two of all the Marauders, but mainly on Remus and Sirius (since those are the memories he is drawing on), it would be that much better. You write very well!


Chapter 1: If Only...
Harry is suddenly having nightmares again despite his Occlumency training. He is uncertain of who is haunting his dreams, but knows he must help her. What unforeseen dangers are awaiting Harry in his dreams and how will he unlock the mystery of the girl trapped inside his mind...

Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Romance
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Angst, Drama, General, Mystery
Warnings: Alternate Universe, Mild Language, Mild Violence, Sexual Situations, Strong Language, Strong Violence
Chapters: 7 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 21703; Read Count: 5494; Completed: No

Updated: 11/17/2005; Published: 06/10/2005
Reviewer: Desslok (Signed)
09/28/2005
Really great story!!! Very exciting. Normally even the hint of rape/molestation/abuse will set me off a story for good (I really don't need the horrors of the real world in my recreation) but you really handled this tastefully and delicately. You conveyed the menace of Riddle w/o resorting to blatant shock. Very deftly handled! I'm really enjoying this and look forward to more!!!!

Author's Response: Thank you for the wonderful words of encouragement. Look for an update very soon.

Author's Response: By the way, thank you for being patient. RL interfered with my HP life for awhile. I hope to get back to posting regularly...starting tomorrow. Thanks again for the post! I appreciate it.



Chapter 5: Chapter 5: Time for Bed
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Categories: Orphan; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
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Crossover Classes: None
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Chapters: 0 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 0; Read Count: 0; Completed: No

Updated: 12/31/1969; Published: 12/31/1969
Reviewer: Desslok (Signed)
09/26/2005
Ok, I really enjoyed this story, but the end left me really confused. It was the Honey that made her sick? Were Cho and Corner trying to kill her?? Why did they blame Harry if they knew it was the honey? What does glumbumble honey do??

Author's Response: I'm so sorry that I confused you. Glumbumbles can be found in Fantastic Beasts and Where to Find Them. They produce melancholy-inducing treacle. They have been known to infest beehives, with disastrous effects on the honey. Michael and Cho were not trying to kill her. They were just trying to dampen the couple's spirits a bit. The Weasley boys blamed Harry because that's all Ginny would say. The effects of the Glumbumble honey were magnified by her emotional state when eating it. She became severely depressed with no desire to do anything. She wouldn't even take the antidote in her severe state. Harry was the root of her depression before the honey. I'm sorry for the confusion. I should have added an author's note stating where to find information on the Glumbumble.



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After All by Emmeline Vance [Young Teens]
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The Muggle picnic planned for the Hogwarts students is anticipated by all--except for Harry Potter and Ginny Weasley. They both have the same problem, and when one event leads to another...how will such a simple thing turn their whole day around?

Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Romance
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Action/Adventure, Fluff, General
Warnings: Alternate Universe
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 3242; Read Count: 477; Completed: Yes

Updated: 06/23/2005; Published: 06/23/2005
Reviewer: Desslok (Signed)
09/28/2005
Very sweet! I love the challenge stories from SIYE and I can see why this one won an award! Very cute and nice,though I would have like to know their reactions to each other's swimsuits!


Chapter 1: One-Shot

In the spring, Harry realized that he must master his fear of Voldemort.

In the summer, Harry realized that he must master his fear of women.

All things considered, Voldemort doesn't sound so bad.

Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Character Study
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Angst
Warnings: Mild Language
Chapters: 4 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 2551; Read Count: 2474; Completed: Yes

Updated: 06/26/2005; Published: 06/26/2005
Reviewer: Desslok (Signed)
09/28/2005
I really like experimental stories like this. I wrote one myself once that, like this, was nothing but dialog. Never even said who was saying what, but relied on my own ability to portray the characters to make it clear who the speakers were. I think you've mostly succeeded here, though I'm still a bit unsure about the meaning of some of your punctuation marks. :) Is it done?


Chapter 4: What?
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How does the marriage life treat Harry and Ginny Potter? Very good, considering the fact that Ginny is just as fertile as her mother.

Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Romance
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Drama, Fluff
Warnings: Sexual Situations
Chapters: 9 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 30375; Read Count: 7646; Completed: Yes

Updated: 07/13/2005; Published: 06/27/2005
Reviewer: Desslok (Signed)
09/19/2005
I've got to say I was not pleased with that 8th chapter. The angst really came out of nowhere!! I suppose that some would say (NOT ME) that 8 or 9 chapters of pure fluff is overkill, though. Still, the Epilogue helped wash away the trauma and wrap everything up nicely. Overall, I enjoyed this very much.


Chapter 9: Epilogue
Tradition by Emmeline Vance [Young Teens]
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It was only a matter of time before they came face to face and admitted their true feelings for each other...After all, it was destined to be.

Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Romance
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Fluff, General
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 2498; Read Count: 648; Completed: Yes

Updated: 06/28/2005; Published: 06/28/2005
Reviewer: Desslok (Signed)
09/28/2005
Very cute story! i really enjoyed this. You write very well. I think you captured Ginny's character quite accurately and the entire scenario was quite plausible,though the "I love you" was a bit sudden! I like Ron faking being asleep and then running off to tell Hermione he'd won the bet. :)


Chapter 1: One-Shot