Penname: Jayiin [Contact]
Real name: alan m
Member Since: 09/23/2006
Membership status: Administrator

I sometimes think of myself as an internet mystic, exploring the ineffable qualities of the internet and trying to become one with it (aka -- no social life). But I spend too much time in my own mind; I get bored, and decide to share what I found there.

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Reviews by Jayiin

What secrets does Petunia Dursley have, and what will Dumbledore do when Harry turns seventeen, and he can no longer be told that he must stay in the Dursley household? And where do his feelings for Ginny fit in?

Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Alternate Universe (AU), General Fan Fiction
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Drama
Warnings: Alternate Universe, Mild Violence, Sexual Situations
Chapters: 13 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 36487; Read Count: 5875; Completed: Yes

Updated: 08/22/2005; Published: 08/22/2005
Reviewer: Jayiin (Signed)

This story is rapidly turning into a very painful and spiritual journey for Petunia Dursley - I like it quite a bit.  Her seeing what she could - and should - have given Harry.

I'd like to know more about her and Remus, though!

Chapter 7: Chapter 7: Learning
Reviewer: Jayiin (Signed)

Interesting revelations about Petunia and Remus; interesting conversation between Petunia and Harry.

I'm interested to see how you resolve the situation you've set up.

And keeping me interested in is very hard to do - good work.

Chapter 8: Chapter 8: Conversations
Reviewer: Jayiin (Signed)

Fantastic ending.

Chapter 13: Chapter 13: Rainbows
Devil's Advocate by Flickering [Young Teens]
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Hermione and Draco meet in a hallway at Hogwarts, each absorbed in their own thoughts. Without expecting to, they engage in a war of words over moral believes and suppression.

Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Character Study
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Drama
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1529; Read Count: 460; Completed: Yes

Updated: 11/23/2005; Published: 11/23/2005
Reviewer: Jayiin (Signed)
I never thought I would say this, but - go Malfoy.  Well written, well reasoned - well done.

Chapter 1: Devil's Advocate

Post OotP. Harry must deal with the loss of his Godfather, Hogwarts gets a new Defense Professor with more than a few secrets, and Voldemort watches from the shadows, awaiting a moment to strike. Just a typical year for the Boy-Who-Lived, really...

Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: General Fan Fiction
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Action/Adventure, General
Warnings: Alternate Universe, Mild Language, Mild Violence
Chapters: 36 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 158163; Read Count: 102507; Completed: No

Updated: 07/18/2009; Published: 01/14/2006
Reviewer: Jayiin (Signed)

So yeah.  Re-reading this for reasons I'm sure you can guess.  I can seen the differences from the old FFn version of this, and I like. 


I love how Harry carried her upstairs and how he and Ginny banded together to drive of Vernon.  And the subtlety of your introduction of James Milton was neatly done. 

Chapter 1: Privet Drive
Reviewer: Jayiin (Signed)

You bastard!  You killed Hedwig!


I've wanted to write that for years.  Honestly, I'd forgotten you'd killed her.  Powerful chapter.  


You never did address why Ginny was crying at the beginning of the chapter thought. 

Chapter 2: The Gift of Life
Reviewer: Jayiin (Signed)

This is a good chapter.  It shows Harry growing into being a leader and how well he's established trust with people - and how Dumbledore is trying to re-establish trust with him.


I especially like Ron's reaction to Voldemort's name,  Instead of just being the name of the Dark Lord, it's a more personal fear. 

Chapter 3: The Morning After
Reviewer: Jayiin (Signed)
The power of the pout is not to be denied.  This chapter is when I really started to like James as a character.

Chapter 4: Diagon Alley
Reviewer: Jayiin (Signed)

I love the twins; I always have.  They're good creations and fill a void left by Fred and George.  They also give a good foil to the trio.


Two thoughts: the first is that I'm not sure Hermione should have been able to cast her Reductor Curse, as it is over the holidays, but being at Hogwarts might have changed that.  


Second?  I hate any 'had had' constructions. 

Chapter 5: The Hogwarts Express
Reviewer: Jayiin (Signed)

The interactions between Harry and Ginny in this chapter are very solid; it shows just how much they've grown to be comfortable with each other.


Ginny's outburst during the conversation with Dumbledore shows how much she's come to know about him.

Chapter 6: The Welcoming Feast