Penname: Orual [Contact]
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Member Since: 08/12/2006
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Hello.  My name is Anna.  I don't have much to say about myself. I'm just a girl who likes to write. 



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Dudley Dursley is ordered by the court to change his deliquent ways. Guess who is in charge of his house arrest? Harry Potter, of course. Based on a true story.

Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Humor
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Chapters: 11 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 40169; Read Count: 14783; Completed: No

Updated: 10/07/2006; Published: 09/06/2005
Reviewer: Orual (Signed)
09/19/2006

Snape is a little bit nicer than I imagine him, but everyone else in the story is perfectly in character.  I really like how you've brought Dudley along.  Great job, I'm looking forward to your next chapter.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much!  I'm glad you approve of Dudley.  I was trying really hard not to make Snape nicer, but its difficult.  I've been influenced by several wonderful Snape fics.  Petunia is the hardest to write because I despise her.

I'm glad you are enjoying the story.  I'll update the next chapter by Friday.  Thanks for reviewing!




Chapter 8: It's Harry's Fault!
Reviewer: Orual (Signed)
09/25/2006
Very nice.  I must say, I never pictured Snape as a cat person, either.  Though I do suppose they both hate people.  Great job, keep up the good work.

Author's Response:

Thank you Orual!  Your reasoning makes perfect sense to me.  I have this image of Snape allowing the Kneazle ride on his shoulders all over Hogwarts.  I can see them spitting at the students in unison.

Thanks!!




Chapter 9: Lightning Over Hogwarts
...and joined a tenpin bowling league instead. This crazy, AU ficlet is the result of a writing contest and an insane, persistent plot bunny.

Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Humor
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Fluff
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 3296; Read Count: 508; Completed: Yes

Updated: 12/23/2005; Published: 12/23/2005
Reviewer: Orual (Signed)
09/03/2006
Ha, that was great.  Especially the Snape fangirls.  I just loved it all around.  Great job.


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Just after killing his father, Tom Riddle escapes to Romania to think about his heiritage, his life, and what he thinks about death itself. He runs into many obstacles, each of which only push him to further examine himself and the life he lives. He has to make a decision-- and the question is, what will the outcome be?



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Dark Fiction
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Angst
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 6454; Read Count: 331; Completed: Yes

Updated: 08/12/2006; Published: 08/12/2006
Reviewer: Orual (Signed)
08/13/2006

Wow, this was great.  I've never seen Tom Riddle given a plausible motive in trying to live forever.  You conveyed his thoughts very well. It almost fits canon, even, except for the fact that Riddle didn't learn about Horcruxes until some time after he killed his father.  But I don't think anyone will mind the diviantion from canon, I certainly don't.  

 I rather liked your Circe riddle, too.  Very creative. 



Author's Response: Thanks. This was actually written for a challenge where they gave us obstacles and we had to complete them, and it was extremely fun. Thanks again!



Chapter 1: Chosing a Side
Passing the Torch by Cyborg [Mid Teens]
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Harry decides enough is enough when the Order once again keeps him isolated after Dumbledore's death. He escapes Privet Drive and goes out into the world by himself to search for a way to defeat Voldemort and his Horcruxes, and to find a reason for doing it. Spoilers of HBP and all previous books.

1500 words into 10. 



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Romance
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Action/Adventure
Warnings: Alternate Universe, Mild Language, Mild Violence
Chapters: 10 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 52336; Read Count: 9842; Completed: No

Updated: 03/19/2008; Published: 08/26/2006
Reviewer: Orual (Signed)
08/27/2006

I think you've got a good start, I thought your descriptions of the wizarding world at war were very believeable.  However, I do think your need to be careful with your characterization of Harry and his impending romance with an original charcter (unless I'm assuming too much).  You've made Harry very independent and given him a grasp of magic that he never displays in the book, and then he's angry at Ginny on top of that when all she did in the book was try to avoid hurting him.  Combining that characterization with an American girl who has some sort of seer/prophetess power is a recipe for cliche if you are careless. 

All in all, though, I am curious to see where you are going.  Keep writing.



Author's Response: Well thank you very much. Yes, this story is very slightly AU in the fact that Harry knows more than was stated in cannon. While he is frustrated at Ginny, the larger reason for his leaving was a combination of him wanting to protect Ron and Hermione and his frustration with the Order. I always figured that Harry needed a strong girlfriend, and Ginny didnt show her usual strength when be broke up with her. As for the possible cliche, yes it definately could turn out that way, but I hope that my plot is unique enough to steer it away from that. No comment on the possible seer issue besides that it aint as simple as that. ;) Thanks again and I hope you stick with me!



Chapter 1: New Beginnings for All
Reviewer: Orual (Signed)
09/02/2006

On the whole, you did a very nice job with this chapter.  I find Matt's bounciness endearing, though he played a rather small role in this chapter.  My only complaint is that I think you lost a little bit of Harry's character with: “No, not many would have done what you and your family did. I know plenty of people that would have cracked another one of my ribs and left me there. No one would take a stranger into their home.”  It just seemed unnecessarily angsty.  But you are the author.  

If you still need a beta reader, you can email me at annathecubsfan@gmail.com.  You can usually expect same day feedback from me.  I don't consider myself harsh, but I am critical, so be forewarned.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review! Don't worry about Matt's minor role. He is definately a character that i have plans for. this chapter was an intro to my OC's, some setting intro, and a bit of relationship development between Harry and Kaycee. Expect more action in the future.

You're right. Perhaps it was out of character, but i wanted the Pearsons to have a slight hint at Harry's past life. Thanks again! 




Chapter 2: Pearsons in the Forest
Reviewer: Orual (Signed)
10/01/2006

Hey, good to see an update.  I liked this chapter.  I'm glad you came back to Harry's friends; I hate it when authors just throw them away.  Nice job, keep up the good work.



Author's Response: Thank you very much. This story is currently going to focus on three viewpoints. Harry, Hermione, and a currently unknown character. Chapter four is about a page along so far.



Chapter 3: Otters and Terriers
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Aging Professor Merrythought invites her favorite student, Tom, to tea.

Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: General Fan Fiction, Pre-Canon
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Drama
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 724; Read Count: 592; Completed: Yes

Updated: 09/02/2006; Published: 09/02/2006
Reviewer: Orual (Signed)
09/03/2006
Very, very good.  I liked the fact that Professor Merrythought never suspected anything evil from Tom.  Nice hints at Tom's Legilimency, as well.  I'm impressed.

Author's Response: Oh, yay, you caught the Legilimancy bit.  Thanks.  I'm fascinated by Tom and his origins. 



Chapter 1: An Innocent Yea
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Categories: Orphan; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: None
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Chapters: 0 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 0; Read Count: 0; Completed: No

Updated: 12/31/1969; Published: 12/31/1969
Reviewer: Orual (Signed)
09/03/2006
Ron is a little out of character, true, but the only part that really screamed "OOC!" at me was "my little bookworm."  The rest of it was really quite sweet.

Author's Response: *laughs* thanks for your input!  I really wanted him to seem kind of lovestruck there, but...yeah, I totally agree.  I really couldn't get Ron to act normally in this.  Thanks for the review!  :D



Chapter 1: Love
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Minerva has a craving for tuna and goes to the kitchen. However, someone else is there who is just about to eat the last one.



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Drabble
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 106; Read Count: 462; Completed: Yes

Updated: 09/04/2006; Published: 09/04/2006
Reviewer: Orual (Signed)
09/04/2006
Ha, quite funny.  I can just imagine the house elves standing by screaming, "No, don't fight, we'll find more tuna, no, please, don't ruin our kitchen.  NO!!!"


Chapter 1: Chapter 1