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Member Since: 05/01/2006
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I reside in Texas, USA and have always had a particular fondness for vampires, werewolves, dragons, and other fantastical creatures, as befits my penname. Thus, dark, angsty characters and themes are likely to be reflected in my own writing endeavours and reading preferences.

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Plastic Dementors by Jess [Mid Teens]
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In some cultures, it is said that each time a picture is taken of someone, a bit of their soul is removed. After being in the limelight for so long, Harry Potter is apt to agree.

Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Character Study, Dark Fiction
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Angst
Warnings: Character Death, Dark Fiction
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1157; Read Count: 790; Completed: Yes

Updated: 09/01/2005; Published: 09/01/2005
Reviewer: LoneStarVamp (Signed)
06/20/2006

I adore Harry and would never wish such a sad, despairing end for him.  Yet I was drawn to reading this brilliant story - the title caught my attention and I had to keep reading.  The "Flash, Click" device added an ominous feeling before each vignette, capturing small but powerful moments of time leading to the inevitable.  Well done! I look forward to reading more from you. LSV




Chapter 1: Plastic Dementors

Harry’s been turned into a daylight vampire and was kicked out of the social circles in the wizarding world. He is now mature, powerful and something else than he was supposed to be. AU.



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Alternate Universe (AU), Dark Fiction
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Action/Adventure, Mystery
Warnings: Alternate Universe, Character Death, Dark Fiction, Mild Violence, Sexual Situations
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 3315; Read Count: 148; Completed: No

Updated: 10/04/2005; Published: 09/30/2005
Reviewer: LoneStarVamp (Signed)
05/11/2006
The idea of suddenly meeting Harry at age 30 and in the form of a daylight vamp is mysterious and intriguing!  It would be fascinating to get the backstory on the events leading up to his being bitten.  Perhaps you'll consider writing a pre-quel! 


Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Reviewer: LoneStarVamp (Signed)
05/11/2006
I hope you will continue with this fascinating story and not leave us without an ending - keep writing, please!


Chapter 2: Chapter 2
A simple note left by Fred and George for Dolores Umbridge with regards to their sudden departure from Hogwarts.

Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Drabble
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: Tales of the Troublesome Twosome
Word count: 320; Read Count: 474; Completed: Yes

Updated: 03/01/2006; Published: 03/01/2006
Reviewer: LoneStarVamp (Signed)
06/25/2006
Hem. . . Hem. . . I would love to have seen the look on Umbridge's face as she read this farewell from the twins - I always laugh when I think about the swamp, never mind all the fireworks!  Nicely done!  LSV


Chapter 1: A Fred and George Fic
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Remus Lupin contemplates his life in solitude. Short and sweet.



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Poetry
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Angst
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 80; Read Count: 509; Completed: Yes

Updated: 03/26/2006; Published: 03/26/2006
Reviewer: LoneStarVamp (Signed)
05/20/2006

A very nice effort - I'm sure I'll come back to contemplate this one again.  Poor Remus. . . sad.

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Author's Response: Thanks, glad you liked it!



Chapter 1: Sonnet for the Moon

Just a poem about how excluded Remus feels because of his lycanthropy and how he wants to run away to a place where he can be at peace.



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Poetry
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Drama, General
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 96; Read Count: 490; Completed: Yes

Updated: 03/29/2006; Published: 03/28/2006
Reviewer: LoneStarVamp (Signed)
05/20/2006

I loved the imagery in this poem - it truly speaks to the emotions Lupin no doubt carries deeply within himself and which he seldom has an opportunity express.  Now you've done that for him!  Nice work - let's see more from you!

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Author's Response: Aw, thank you! I love Remus, thus that means SO MUCH to me!!! *tears of joy*



Chapter 1: Where the Wolf is One with the Wild

While New Year's eve parties rage on all around him, a tragic hero is trapped in depression. Only one person can free him.



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Dark Fiction
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Angst
Warnings: Dark Fiction
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 3037; Read Count: 557; Completed: Yes

Updated: 04/21/2006; Published: 04/20/2006
Reviewer: LoneStarVamp (Signed)
05/05/2006

I very much enjoyed reading this short story.  It's so rare that we gain insight into Draco's feelings, i.e. what's beneath the surface of his overt bullying behavior.  This story was, overall, very well constructed and written. There was repetition of Draco's verbal expressions about betraying friends and family; however, this is easily remedied should you ever wish to, perhaps, find different ways of saying the same thing.

The ease with which I could imagine the scenario unfolding in my mind as I read the story impressed me, as I consider myself to be a very visual person.  This added depth to the reading experience because the story and emotions came to life for me.

Writing a short story is, in many ways, more challenging than a chaptered series, because it must encompass a beginning, middle and ending within a constrained word count.  The author must tell the story quickly and concisely - and tell it well.  You've certainly done that!

BTW, if you do ever edit the story, I'd suggest you remove the words "The End", as it isn't necessary to tell the reader they've reached the conclusion of the story!

Lovely work!

Regards, LSV in Dallas
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Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I wrote this long before the release of HBP, so I must confess that my feelings towards Snape have changed somewhat. However, this piece has been well received at other sites, so hopefully you will enjoy it too. The title explains it all.



Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: None
Classification: Poetry
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: None
Warnings: Dark Fiction
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 41; Read Count: 511; Completed: Yes

Updated: 05/02/2006; Published: 05/02/2006
Reviewer: LoneStarVamp (Signed)
05/20/2006

I lied this very short poem, as it suggests the inner demons Snape is always struggling with, regardless of whether the poem was written pre- or post-HBP.  I'd like to see more Snape poetry from you!

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Author's Response: Thanks, I\'m glad you enjoyed it, and that you\'re looking into some of my other work too!



Chapter 1: The Poetry of Severus Snape
Trust and Faith by ladylarna [Mid Teens]
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Bellatrix Lestrange isn't sure what she believes. Rodolphus helps her figure out where she stands in a war where darkness is consuming. Post-HBP; oneshot.

Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: Summer Angst (CLOSED)
Classification: Drabble
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Angst
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1554; Read Count: 519; Completed: Yes

Updated: 05/06/2006; Published: 05/05/2006
Reviewer: LoneStarVamp (Signed)
05/25/2006
Well written and psychologically intense. An excellent - and disturbing - foray into the mind of one of JKR's darkest characters. Nicely done!


Chapter 1: Trust and Faith
Filch's Regrets by Spiderwort [Young Teens]
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Argus Filch reflects on his sins, nursing a bottle of hard cider.  His worst enemies and one termagant of a librarian help him through his pain.

Categories: Harry Potter; Characters: None; Archive Challenge: Summer Angst (CLOSED)
Classification: General Fan Fiction
Crossover Classes: None
Genres: Angst
Warnings: Alcohol and/or Drug Abuse
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 3384; Read Count: 510; Completed: Yes

Updated: 05/06/2006; Published: 05/06/2006
Reviewer: LoneStarVamp (Signed)
05/25/2006

Reading a story about Argus Filch was certainly a different fan fic experience!  You've really nailed his character and did a great job of blending the very serious events of HBP with the humour and pathos of Filch's past and the influences that shaped him.

An unexpected appearace by the "Evil Weasel Twins" is always a gift to the reader.  Nicely done!

LSV




Chapter 1: Chapter 1