|
|
||
I reside in Texas, USA and have always had a particular fondness for vampires, werewolves, dragons, and other fantastical creatures, as befits my penname. Thus, dark, angsty characters and themes are likely to be reflected in my own writing endeavours and reading preferences.
LoneStarVamp
PI Accredited Beta Reader
#PI:2058264223
I adore Harry and would never wish such a sad, despairing end for him. Yet I was drawn to reading this brilliant story - the title caught my attention and I had to keep reading. The "Flash, Click" device added an ominous feeling before each vignette, capturing small but powerful moments of time leading to the inevitable. Well done! I look forward to reading more from you. LSV
Harry’s been turned into a daylight vampire and was kicked out of the social circles in the wizarding world. He is now mature, powerful and something else than he was supposed to be. AU.
Remus Lupin contemplates his life in solitude. Short and sweet.
A very nice effort - I'm sure I'll come back to contemplate this one again. Poor Remus. . . sad.
LoneStarVamp
PI Accredited Beta Reader
PI:2058264223
WT Staff Member/Beta Team
Just a poem about how excluded Remus feels because of his lycanthropy and how he wants to run away to a place where he can be at peace.
I loved the imagery in this poem - it truly speaks to the emotions Lupin no doubt carries deeply within himself and which he seldom has an opportunity express. Now you've done that for him! Nice work - let's see more from you!
LoneStarVamp
PI Accredited Beta Reader
PI:2058264223
WT Beta Team
While New Year's eve parties rage on all around him, a tragic hero is trapped in depression. Only one person can free him.
I very much enjoyed reading this short story. It's so rare that we gain insight into Draco's feelings, i.e. what's beneath the surface of his overt bullying behavior. This story was, overall, very well constructed and written. There was repetition of Draco's verbal expressions about betraying friends and family; however, this is easily remedied should you ever wish to, perhaps, find different ways of saying the same thing.
The ease with which I could imagine the scenario unfolding in my mind as I read the story impressed me, as I consider myself to be a very visual person. This added depth to the reading experience because the story and emotions came to life for me.
Writing a short story is, in many ways, more challenging than a chaptered series, because it must encompass a beginning, middle and ending within a constrained word count. The author must tell the story quickly and concisely - and tell it well. You've certainly done that!
BTW, if you do ever edit the story, I'd suggest you remove the words "The End", as it isn't necessary to tell the reader they've reached the conclusion of the story!
Lovely work!
Regards, LSV in Dallas
Perfect Imagination Accredited Beta Reader
I wrote this long before the release of HBP, so I must confess that my feelings towards Snape have changed somewhat. However, this piece has been well received at other sites, so hopefully you will enjoy it too. The title explains it all.
I lied this very short poem, as it suggests the inner demons Snape is always struggling with, regardless of whether the poem was written pre- or post-HBP. I'd like to see more Snape poetry from you!
LoneStarVamp
PI Accredited Beta Reader
PI:2058264223
WT Staff Member/Beta Team
Reading a story about Argus Filch was certainly a different fan fic experience! You've really nailed his character and did a great job of blending the very serious events of HBP with the humour and pathos of Filch's past and the influences that shaped him.
An unexpected appearace by the "Evil Weasel Twins" is always a gift to the reader. Nicely done!
LSV
