Hermione hates Ron and is ranting to Harry abou how much she hates him. look at the tital it explain all you need to know from here. I was reading Romeo and Juliet when I wrote it and I was also really mad at someone.
Good development of plot and character. The only thing that struck me as a bit off was Vernon calling Harry "Potter". Would have seemed more like Vernon if he'd said "Boy". Looking forward to see where you take this.
Author's Response: That's not the first time I have had that comment. I think I am going to change that line.
A very well done and emotional chapter. I thought it was telling while everyone else was reacting to the Dursleys and their mistreatment, Ginny moved past all of that and got to the one thing that mattered: "Where is he?"
Author's Response: Yep, Ginny is VERY good at getting to the heart of the matter where Harry is concerned...and that will come in handy later on.
"We love you."? Ginny keeps missing with the pronouns... and Molly let Dumbledore off much too lightly.
Author's Response: Ah, you're right, Ginny messes up her pronouns...and there is a reason for it. She's not very good at hiding things, is she? As for Molly...Dumbledore has it coming to him. Wait until Chapter 24!
The interplay between Lupin and Harry is excellent, though Harry seems very accepting of all this. Hopefully he'll be up to pushing back a little soon. Your handling of Ginny is also well done. A good read.
Author's Response: Harry will not be accepting of it forever - right now he is simply too emotionally spent to care about almost anything. Between Sirius' death and everything that has happened sense, I don't see him as having much room left for emotion.
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