Penname: Aohd Rose [Contact]
Real name: Amelia
Member Since: 01/06/07
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Written for the Sci-Fi prompt of the May Challenge.

The tale of a boy who slowly finds himself alone.



Categories: Science Fiction, May Challenge; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1850; Read Count: 843; Completed: Yes

Updated: 09/06/07; Published: 08/06/07
Reviewer: Aohd Rose (Signed)
31/07/07

I liked this, is was really cool! A spin-off exploring further into this world would be really great- the world and story has alot of potential. You actually leave alot of questions (is he the last person? where exactly did the others go? why did his parents stay behind? what happened to the world?) You were artfully vague- you make the reader just as..miffed as the character, which is a great way to draw in the reader, and make the character memorable to them. Something more to answer our questions I think would be well received. Good Job!




Chapter 1: Chapter 1
I am only fourteen, and already my life has been changed irreversibly. I no longer trust my family; they betrayed me. Read my story here.


Categories: General Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 2239; Read Count: 655; Completed: Yes

Updated: 19/06/07; Published: 19/06/07
Reviewer: Aohd Rose (Signed)
15/08/07
This was a nice story- sort of fast, but you got the message across. Its sweet, the idea of living happily ever after even after something as horrible as losing your family. It was well written- keep up the good work.


Chapter 1: But What Do You Do With the Survivors?
And he touches her hand, and traces the lines. He murmurs his love and expresses that he wishes she was still there.

Categories: General Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 878; Read Count: 631; Completed: Yes

Updated: 28/06/07; Published: 27/06/07
Reviewer: Aohd Rose (Signed)
31/07/07
Talk about sad! It made me want to go hug my mom! This was written really well, and you managed to convey such emotion, that the reader managed to feel it. Great work!

Author's Response:

Thanks for the review!

YEEEAH!! I'm glad that you were able to feel the emotion in this fic. It gives me a sort of confidence boost to know that the sadness I was hoping would come through the fic, did! 

I hope your mom enjoys the hug!

Thanks so much!

-Mackenzie 




Chapter 1: With the Stars
Water and Fire by apollo13 [General]
starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 6]

In a world where darkness rules, and Humans, Pixies, Centaurs and Forest Maidens are forced into slavery, there seems to be no hope for those who are deemed weak, and lead a life of suffering.

One girl wants to change all that, and hopes to lead a revolution against The Leader, and all his beliefs. But she cannot do it if she doesn't understand her own kind, and what she, and everyone else, wants.

Will she create a better, fairer life for everyone? Or will she just make things worse? After all, all she has to go on are the words of stories, which no one knows are true...



Categories: Fantasy Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 3 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 5215; Read Count: 3265; Completed: No

Updated: 28/08/07; Published: 31/07/07
Reviewer: Aohd Rose (Signed)
08/08/07
This is a really promising beginning! I especially loved the first part- it was almost whimsical, but at the same time bitter- very well written and described. Looking forward to more, keep up the great work!

Author's Response:

Thank you! :D

~Evie




Chapter 1: Prologue
Reviewer: Aohd Rose (Signed)
14/08/07
This looks really cool- it has quite a bit of potential. As to the riddle- its a cool one, but at this moment I have no idea about the answer- would you be kind and tell me? Anyway, rock on!

Author's Response:

You'll find out at the begining of the next chapter. :)

~Evie




Chapter 2: Examination
She reflects on the good times and the bad times and what she loved and lost, and the park has been there to see it all.

Categories: General Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1228; Read Count: 711; Completed: Yes

Updated: 07/08/07; Published: 02/08/07
Reviewer: Aohd Rose (Signed)
08/08/07
Well, that was sad! Bitter and unrequited love...and sad endings...I'm not usually much for them, but you did an excellent job writing it. Some of your descriptions were fantastic, and the character was very real. Good Job!

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for the kind review. I'm glad you liked the character I am love/hate with it at times. Your comment is deeply appreciated.




Chapter 1: The Park
Ten Green Bottles by apollo13 [Young Teen]
starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 7]

That song calls me. Am I human? Maybe. No one knows. No one knows that it's me - me that takes the children. No one knows where they go.

They just vanish.

I only came a short while ago. But it's been enough time.

Why do you fear me so? The same reason you fear the dark. The same reason you fear that strange noise outside your window.

Because you can't see me. You can't stop me.

So here is the story of a few of my memorable victims. Read it, if you must, and make up your own mind on what I am, and where they go...



Categories: Horror Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 2505; Read Count: 661; Completed: Yes

Updated: 16/08/07; Published: 15/08/07
Reviewer: Aohd Rose (Signed)
17/08/07
Very neat! That was a bit creepy, wasn't it? Scary boogey man called by the sound of a haunting nursery rhyme... Very well done! Can you tell me more about his creepy boogeyman person? The choosing of the song was great...my little sister and I started singing it together when I began to read this and sing it under my breath. We stopped because she had to go to bed, but by the time i finished I wanted to look over my shoulder, or go check on her. I did. This was fantastic! Good job!

Author's Response:

lol, that's the effect I wanted! :D

Thanks for reading and reviewing.

~Evie




Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Diary of Evil by apollo13 [Young Teen]
starstarstarstar [Reviews - 2]

While on a German trip with her students, Elizabeth Conlon is delighted to discover an important historical source.

She emails her boss straight away with the details, and a typed up copy of the diary of an unknown Nazi.

This diary tells the story of the rise of Hitler, and even the beginnings of the Second World War. While she searches for the rest, come, and read the beginning.

The story of how it all started.

The reasons why they voted for Hitler.

*First in The Second Story series, which follows Elizabeth as she discovers more about the author of the diary, as well as many other, previously untold stories, from all sorts of era's.*



Categories: General Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: Second Story
Word count: 4890; Read Count: 782; Completed: Yes

Updated: 24/08/07; Published: 19/08/07
Reviewer: Aohd Rose (Signed)
25/08/07
Very intersting. It was well written- it sounded like a real journal entry. Any gaps, for example, what made him change his mind about the nazis, are explained by the missing bits in the journal. Its actually really sad- he dies 5 years from the time this chapter ends. Well, the whole era was sad really- what made you choose to write about it? Its well written,you did very well. I wish I could sound a little more hyped, but its not a very uplifting story- that doesn't mean its not good though. As always, keep up the good work!

Author's Response:

I am very interested in the second world war and also in the rise of Hitler. I find it so fascinating how such an evil man came to power, but I find that everyone just assumes that every single German of the time was evil. They wern't, they were brainwashed. A lot of them were evil, but many had no choice in the matter.

I'm glad you liked it! :D

~Evie




Chapter 1: Diary of Evil