Penname: Rynn [Contact]
Real name: Hadeer
Member Since: 05/08/07
Membership status: Member


Hello - BloodRayne from MNFF here, hoping to produce something substantially good enough to be viewed by a stranger's eyes.





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Reviews by Rynn
Past Featured Story

Dad left Mom. Mom was fine. Mom met Paul. Mom married Paul. I was fine. I met Kimberley.

...Stepsisters aren't all that bad, you know.



Categories: General Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 3919; Read Count: 1051; Completed: Yes

Updated: 02/02/07; Published: 02/02/07
Reviewer: Rynn (Signed)
05/08/07

Wow, Mariah, I so loved that!  It was really funny - I guess some people aren't shy at all huh? That Kimberly really got on my nerves.  Poor Heather.  But you could really go on with this - it'd be cool to see other ways Kim annoys Heather.  It's a really great story! And it's also inspired me to write a stepsister themed story - although with a completely different plot.

-Hadeer



Author's Response: Hadeer! *hugs* I didn't know you were a part of this community! Anyway, thanks for the review! Glad you enjoyed it. I suppose if I do anything more with this, it'll probably end up being a series of one-shots. Don't know when that'll be though. Anyway, thanks again!



Chapter 1: Chocolate Night
Prejudice by Caitlin Tam [Young Adult]
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Gabriella Thomas knew that being a daughter of a suspected witch at the height of the Salem Trials had dire consequences...

Categories: General Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1092; Read Count: 271; Completed: Yes

Updated: 02/02/07; Published: 02/02/07
Reviewer: Rynn (Signed)
05/08/07

I don't understand.  Is he going to rape her or is he keeping her here so they can capture her mother? Or are they going to capture Gabriella as well? Had Colin been a traitor all along?




Chapter 1: Prejudice
You Are by animimares [Young Teen]
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Why were you, of all people, damned to walk through life alone? Religious and homosexual themes.



Categories: General Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 3849; Read Count: 603; Completed: Yes

Updated: 05/02/07; Published: 05/02/07
Reviewer: Rynn (Signed)
05/08/07

Oh dear God.

That was absoultely stunning.  I stand before you, utterly speechless.  I have got tears in my eyes - this is...just so beautiful.  The use of second person worked wonders here, and I absolutely loved the bits in parenthesis you used, they were really a highlight of the story.  But wow - this story is just too good for words - nothing can describe how amazing it is.  You, my dear, are an extrodinary writer.  This story...wow.  Don't ever stop writing.  This was enchanting, phenomenal, haunting...simply beautiful!




Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Rugged Turf by Caitlin Tam [Young Teen]
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It's Valentine's Day. How can Caleb Malone, a creature believed to exist only in myths and legends, convince his human friend of his true existence?



Categories: General Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 3155; Read Count: 713; Completed: Yes

Updated: 11/02/07; Published: 10/02/07
Reviewer: Rynn (Signed)
05/08/07
That was...bittersweet.  Lovely, yet bittersweet.  She fell in love with a vampire of all people? But I did love it - Caleb has an endearing personality, I love the way you created that character.  And Lynn in that institute - wow.  I reall liked this.


Chapter 1: Rugged Turf
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Past Featured Story

A teenage girl wonders about the aspects of love and asks you, the reader, to help her figure out whether she is in love or not with a man she met through her ex.

 



Categories: Romance Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1853; Read Count: 769; Completed: Yes

Updated: 14/02/07; Published: 14/02/07
Reviewer: Rynn (Signed)
05/08/07

I like the way Nicole speaks.  The first paragraph really got me hooked - it's written beautifully.  But I didn't understand - what happened to Jason? I understand the man she went out with was six years her senior - but that couldn't be Jason - could it?



Author's Response: Yes, that was Jason... Nicole is unsure if she is in love or not. I am glad you liked it



Chapter 1: What is Love?
Elkheart Woods by Fatima [Young Adult]
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Some people have secret lives that they hide from the eyes of friends and neighbors.  Mara Elkheart has a secret soul--she just doesn't know it yet.When she begins to see hidden windows and doors within the fabric of reality, Mara finds herself in dire need of the knowledge locked inside her hidden consciousness.  However, that consciousness has secrets, and there are those who will stop at nothing to ensure that those secrets remain unspoken.

Categories: Science Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1443; Read Count: 273; Completed: No

Updated: 23/02/07; Published: 23/02/07
Reviewer: Rynn (Signed)
05/08/07
Your style of writing is phenomenal! The way you write is descriptive, yet simple enough to keep us hooked and entertained.  The way you managed to keep us shrouded in mystery is splendid - I was never good with suspense.  I'd really, really love a second chapter, a continuation to this!


Chapter 1: One
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When teenager Cassie Sherman gives up her infant daughter, she never dreams that they will one day meet again. Circumstances and perhaps a touch of a higher power, however, dictate differently...but can she find her daughter in time to save her life?



Categories: General Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1346; Read Count: 282; Completed: No

Updated: 09/03/07; Published: 09/03/07
Reviewer: Rynn (Signed)
06/08/07
This is great.  I think you've managed to capture the POV of a deranged murderer VERY well.  This is very interesting, and I can't wait to see what goes on next!


Chapter 1: Prologue
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Past Featured Story

A pregnant woman, tainted before her own birth, finds that her baby will become the Devil's child and result in the end of days. Now she must deal with the discovery and figure out if she should kill her baby or let him live and bring about the end of the world.



Categories: Horror Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 5 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 7784; Read Count: 2087; Completed: Yes

Updated: 07/04/07; Published: 22/03/07
Reviewer: Rynn (Signed)
05/08/07

That was...a bit disturbing, frankly.  Not to say I didn't like it - so please don't take offense! It's actually quite an interesting story, really.  It had me hooked from the first chapter.  In the second chapter, you mentioned you being uncomfortable with the use of the c-word, but I think sometimes it is necessary to use certain words and descriptions.  I know when I pictured that old woman cursing like that it increased my terror of her.  You had that scene written well. 

Father Michael...let me just say I immedietely thought of Silas from The Da Vinci Code.  Anyway, he seemed a bit odd to me from the start, but attempting to murder Raven's child...and having sex with Christina.  I don't know how that man got to be a priest.

This last chapter...Raven has gone mad, hasn't she? The necrophilia just didn't seem to suit her personality unless she had gotten extremely sick in the head.  And then murdering her father for her baby...wow, I would like an epilouge though.  I feel like I need more closure, although it is fine the way it is, I just always like to see how things end, ya know.  Great story, although it certainly scared me a bit.



Author's Response:

Thank you very much for the review. Silas was a bit of an inspiration for that character on top of an albino friend of mine.

He is very twisted but believed he was doing everything in the name of God. I was hoping to write another story for Christina.

 And last but not least, yes, Raven had become very sick. Thanks again for reading

-Lady M




Chapter 5: Chapter 5
An Unwanted Adventure by Jade [Young Adult]
[Reviews - 2]
Michela's merchant father has connections abroad, and his latest business venture will send her farther than she ever wished to go, and forever. She feels as though she'll never find solace in a culture she doesn't understand (and wearing a corset that cuts off her breath), but she may discover it from an unexpected source.

Categories: Romance Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1718; Read Count: 253; Completed: Yes

Updated: 09/06/07; Published: 08/06/07
Reviewer: Rynn (Signed)
05/08/07

She's gonna marry his...dad? Wow...tough...although the way you've written it seems like she is going to start some kind of affair with her husband's son...that would be an interesting dilemma to read about.  I liked your story, though.

 



Author's Response: Yep, you've got all the details right! Maybe I'll continue the story? Thanks so much for reading!



Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Impossible by Lady Apostrophe [Young Teen]
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Her smile was unchanging, but her eyes became oddly unfocused.

Sunshine, smiles, and poolside laughter can be unsettlingly deceiving.



Categories: General Fiction, July Challenge; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1453; Read Count: 775; Completed: Yes

Updated: 16/07/07; Published: 16/07/07
Reviewer: Rynn (Signed)
02/11/07
That was quite lovely.  Reading it, I recieved a pleasant little shock at the end.  I love the suspense you created, and that line about the missing detail really pulled me into the tension.  Awesome!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for taking the time to review! These make my day. :)



Chapter 1: Impossible
Water and Fire by apollo13 [General]
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In a world where darkness rules, and Humans, Pixies, Centaurs and Forest Maidens are forced into slavery, there seems to be no hope for those who are deemed weak, and lead a life of suffering.

One girl wants to change all that, and hopes to lead a revolution against The Leader, and all his beliefs. But she cannot do it if she doesn't understand her own kind, and what she, and everyone else, wants.

Will she create a better, fairer life for everyone? Or will she just make things worse? After all, all she has to go on are the words of stories, which no one knows are true...



Categories: Fantasy Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 3 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 5215; Read Count: 3272; Completed: No

Updated: 28/08/07; Published: 31/07/07
Reviewer: Rynn (Signed)
07/08/07

This plot has really gotten my attention, Evie! I like how you went right through and introduced the main character (Grace, right?) without wasting time, even if it is a very short, and not very informative intro.  This makes me hungry for more.  I want to get to know Grace.  The idea of water or fire, poverty or wealth, is an interesting one.  Can't wait for the next chapter!

-Hadeer



Author's Response:

Thank you! Yes, the main character is Grace. :)

 

~Evie




Chapter 1: Prologue
Reviewer: Rynn (Signed)
14/08/07

I've seen this riddle before in Yu-Gi-Oh! If only I could remember it...but are you supposed to know who is the liar and who is the truth-teller? Because if you do, wouldn't you just ask which road was the road to happiness? Or am I missing something incredibly huge here? Sorry, I was never good with riddles! But I'd love to know the answer.

 Anyay, water=poverty, if I recall correctly.  This is great...I can't wait for the rebellion.  I like how you're taking things slow.  I don't like rushed stories, and you're doing the exact opposite, and yet not too slow.  So good for you! Keep going!



Author's Response:

No, you do not know which man is which. :) I'll tell you the answer at the begining of the next chapter.

Thanks for reviewing!

~Evie




Chapter 2: Examination
A young woman stumbles across something she shouldn't have...

Categories: Horror Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 835; Read Count: 251; Completed: Yes

Updated: 13/08/07; Published: 13/08/07
Reviewer: Rynn (Signed)
14/08/07

This is wonderful! I'm a fan of gore, so the image that was conveyed when Mila was ripping her own skin...the simple act, that she was hurting herself...it just made it all the more horrible!

 Is there a continuation to this? Are we going to know more about Nodnol and the woman who killed Mila? Because I'd love for that to happen.



Author's Response:

Thank you! I'm hoping to do a few more drabbles, and I'm really hoping to do a full length story about this world. Time will tell...

-Amy




Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Ten Green Bottles by apollo13 [Young Teen]
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That song calls me. Am I human? Maybe. No one knows. No one knows that it's me - me that takes the children. No one knows where they go.

They just vanish.

I only came a short while ago. But it's been enough time.

Why do you fear me so? The same reason you fear the dark. The same reason you fear that strange noise outside your window.

Because you can't see me. You can't stop me.

So here is the story of a few of my memorable victims. Read it, if you must, and make up your own mind on what I am, and where they go...



Categories: Horror Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 2505; Read Count: 661; Completed: Yes

Updated: 16/08/07; Published: 15/08/07
Reviewer: Rynn (Signed)
19/08/07

I loved that! It felt creepy, like the feeling you get when you see Armageddon or something...I wonder just what our little snatcher is, though...

 One thing confused me.  Ashley and Ethan.  Is Ashley a boy's name? And the part with the teddy bear, you said he grabbed his sister's teddy bear.  What was that about.



Author's Response:

Yes, Ashley is very much a boys name in England. It can be a girls name, but more often than not it's a boys name, contrary to America. ;) Maybe I should of used a different name, sorry!

I said sisters teddy bear because they have a sister, though she doesn't appear in the story I just thought it'd be weird for two teenage boys to have a teddy-bear. :p

I'm glad you like the story!

~Evie




Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Magdalena, 16-years-old, lives in Livorno (Tuscany), Italy. Ryan, 17-years-old, lives in Albany, Western Australia. How do the lives of these two teens interwine? Well, by being pen pals! They are assigned as each other's pen pals in a website and start corresponding easily, for they have common interests.

 So how is this interesting? Well, Magdalena's father is offered a job...in a company in Albany! And who has to move along with him? Right -- the rest of the family. Who lives in Albany too again?

 Numerous sub-plots and secondary characters (and BE AWARE of the band geekiness =P)



Categories: Romance Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 2 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 6035; Read Count: 2081; Completed: No

Updated: 23/10/07; Published: 10/10/07
Reviewer: Rynn (Signed)
02/11/07
This is pretty interesting.  Very cool format as well.  It's very funny at parts, although I'm wondering why parents talk to their children through emails? Is that an attempt to continue the whole story through these emails? Well, no doubt that'd be interesting.  Must be difficult, though, eh?

Author's Response:

WELL, the only reason Magdalena and her dad talked through e-mail was because she needed an assignment she'd forgotten to print; and Ryan only talked to his dad through e-mail because his dad wasn't going to be there until the next day and he wanted to clear things up.

 Also, I wanted to introduce their e-mails, since they'll be used in the (near) future.

And no, for some odd reason, I don't find it very difficult. I mean, I'm going to start using ANOTHER way for making things a bit easier, but it'll still have the e-mails, of course. I mean, I really like this format and I'm not about to give it up.

 Well, thanks for reviewing! =D It's really appreciated!




Chapter 2: Chapter 2