Wow, this was amazing! I loved the line - It's only heroine for the nerdy. That was genius! This entire fic was genius!

You really managed to create an eerie, creepy atmosphere, and Ana seems like a very dynamic and real character. :)

~Evie

The imagry in this fic was beautiful - I loved the thought of all the colours and dusty scenery. I have been to Australia only once and that was to Queensland, so it was mainly rainforest and beaches, but I think you've described the out back really well. :) Well, I'm assuming it's in the outback. :o

I loved the flashbacks!

~Evie

This is a good story. :) I like the description in the first paragraph.

I was a bit confused at the end, though. :o Maybe that's just me being a bit thick.

Anyways, I really liked it. :D

~Evie

This was a haunting, real and thought-provoking story. I have a great deal of pity for the main character.

Good job. :)

~Evie

This was a really amazing, beautiful fic. I loved that it was in second person POV and I loved the powerful imagery and words. :D

~Evie

Interesting - it's certainly an orginal and entertaining story. My only crit would be that he is maybe a little old for the type of things he was doing (slaying a dragon and such). My sister is ten, and her and the rest of the kid's in her class are a little more grown up - that's not to say that they don't have imaginary games, but the games are a little more sophisticated. He reminds me more of an eight year old.

~Evie

This was a really good fic - that bit when she was waiting to be tortured... **shudder**

It was well written, and the imagry and emotions of the fic came through really well. And I love your title, it really caught my eye! :D

~Evie

Awww! Kid's can be so cruel! That's really cute and sad at the same time. The poor little girl! I loved your style of writing in this, it made it clear that they were young children without actually saying, they were six, they were seven, ectr.

It reminded me a lot of when I was a little girl and I said I was in love with a boy in my class. LOL! They all laughed and I was so embarressed!

Wonderful story!

~Evie

Poor Stewart!!

Hi, Niki, it's nice to see you outside of MNFF! :D

I love this story - I felt really sorry for Stewart; he was trying his best! Maybe he's better off without her. :p

I liked how it wasn't just one massive thing that split them up, it was loads of little things - it made it more realistic.

I liked Stewarts character as well - his reactions seemed real. And I thought that Olivia was being very selfish.

~Evie

I thought thisflowed really well,it was a beautifulpiece of work.

I'm a history geek and so anything historical interests me, but this fic really drew me in.

It's very tragic and sad, but also very hopeful and inspiring as well, which is always good to see. :)

~Evie

What a brilliant first chapter! I look forward to reading more!

~Evie

lol, I love Alex's character already! :D And I know so many Samantha's...

Great so far, on to the next chapter! :D

~Evie

I like this story - it's really funny! :D And, even though it's about an American High School and I'm not American, I can totally relate to it. :D

 ~Evie

I'm seriously in a fit of giggles here! I dread to think what "Operation Alliteration" is!

Good work, again!

~Evie

Aaaah, what a wonderful story. I'm quite sad it's over. Coughsequelcough.

You've created some very real characters here, and a brilliant, amusing story.

Well done! :D

~Evie

Wow, this is a really deep, rather moving piece. You can really see the torment and confusion of the character. I love how there is no dialogue or action in the fic, and it's all thought - this is something hard to pull off, but it works really well.

I really hope that Bryan takes her back!! :D

~Evie

**shudder** That's quyite creepy. Ms Briar sounds very scary. I thought you did a really good job of describing the asylum, and you handle the abuse she went through very well.

~Evie

I really like this story. It's very hopeful, even if it does seem a little rushed at parts. I liked how Emily was able to move on at the end. :)

~Evie

That's so sad! Seriously, you nearly had me in tears over it! I loved the nice little "homey" touches you added - sandwiches cut in the triangle way was pure genius.

When I first read the summary I thought this was a romance story! :o But I still love this fic. I feel so sorry for the character, he obviously had a strong relationship with his mother. I thought you brought the pain and sadness of his emotions through in the writing very well, and it was a really nice touch that there was no dialogue.

:)

~Evie

Wow, I love this fic - I really like the description, and the powerful words. I thought it was so sad when she lost her baby! :(

It's a really dark fic, but I really enjoyed it, and would love to read more.

~Evie

I can't wait to read more! I love the old language you use - it adds a certain sense of mystery and magic to it.

The style of writing you use really makes me think of LOTR - an epic, mysterious type story. :)

~Evie

oooooooh, creepy! Wow, this was really good. I kinda guessed that the little girl had been abducted, but it still had a good effect. Good job - I'd love to read more, though!

~Evie

You know what's most creepy about this for me? I went to London recently with my mates and we went in one of the underground foot tunnels.

**screams**

Anyways, I love this fic - it's definately creepy and would make an awesome movie. I love your description - especially the market. I'd love to see a spin off with Ezlener - he sounds so cool! :)

~Evie

What a sad ending! This was a beautiful fic, I loved the descriptions (and I'm hard to please with descriptions) and I felt really captured in the story.

Job well done! :)

~Evie

ooooooh, I love this story! I can't wait for the next chapter - I'm in suspense! Keep up the good work!

~Evie