Penname: apollo13 [Contact]
Real name: Evie
Member Since: 26/07/07
Membership status: Member

Hi! I hope to be an author one day, but at the moment I'm just writing on MNFF, so I think I should try my hand at orginal. :) I'm fourteen years old, and I live in Suffolk, England.



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Liquid Library by Naga [General]
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Ana, a young woman so recently in a fight with her roommate, wanders into a nondescript building in efforts to ease her flustered mind. What she finds is something at once wonderous and frightening: a library...of sorts.


Categories: Horror Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 2417; Read Count: 727; Completed: Yes

Updated: 01/02/07; Published: 01/02/07
Reviewer: apollo13 (Signed)
31/07/07

Wow, this was amazing! I loved the line - It's only heroine for the nerdy. That was genius! This entire fic was genius!

You really managed to create an eerie, creepy atmosphere, and Ana seems like a very dynamic and real character. :)

~Evie




Chapter 1: Liquid Library
Fly To Dawn by Lurid [Young Teen]
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“So, this is life. This is what it is to live,” she had smiled.

What is life? Is it merely a state in time to which we interact with others, in which we're influenced by others -- or is it meaningless? is every step or action we take nothing in the great scheme of things?

Time patters on, and waits for no one. As humans, we must push to defy the logical boundaries of death.

 If we wish to live life.

 



Categories: General Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1831; Read Count: 523; Completed: Yes

Updated: 02/02/07; Published: 02/02/07
Reviewer: apollo13 (Signed)
16/08/07

The imagry in this fic was beautiful - I loved the thought of all the colours and dusty scenery. I have been to Australia only once and that was to Queensland, so it was mainly rainforest and beaches, but I think you've described the out back really well. :) Well, I'm assuming it's in the outback. :o

I loved the flashbacks!

~Evie



Author's Response: Hee! QLD is a lot of rainforests, especially in the top end, but no; I'm from Sydney and randomly venture into the more bushy parts, so this is a little resemblant of a ranch near me, and also of a property near my refugee in Golburn :) In other words, my bets friend's house & I can't wait to drink at that pub...



Chapter 1: Bruised
Prejudice by Caitlin Tam [Young Adult]
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Gabriella Thomas knew that being a daughter of a suspected witch at the height of the Salem Trials had dire consequences...

Categories: General Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1092; Read Count: 271; Completed: Yes

Updated: 02/02/07; Published: 02/02/07
Reviewer: apollo13 (Signed)
16/08/07

This is a good story. :) I like the description in the first paragraph.

I was a bit confused at the end, though. :o Maybe that's just me being a bit thick.

Anyways, I really liked it. :D

~Evie




Chapter 1: Prejudice
Unmorality by Naga [Young Adult]
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Even the brightest days can yield to our darkest demons.  A young woman finds herself in a place of laughter and joy after escaping a dark night in the South, only to find a man who wants to hear her story.

Categories: Horror Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 2208; Read Count: 258; Completed: Yes

Updated: 03/02/07; Published: 03/02/07
Reviewer: apollo13 (Signed)
16/08/07

This was a haunting, real and thought-provoking story. I have a great deal of pity for the main character.

Good job. :)

~Evie




Chapter 1: Unmorality
You Are by animimares [Young Teen]
starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 7]

Why were you, of all people, damned to walk through life alone? Religious and homosexual themes.



Categories: General Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 3849; Read Count: 603; Completed: Yes

Updated: 05/02/07; Published: 05/02/07
Reviewer: apollo13 (Signed)
18/08/07

This was a really amazing, beautiful fic. I loved that it was in second person POV and I loved the powerful imagery and words. :D

~Evie




Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Little Garrett lives on a perfect street in a perfect neighborhood where nothing ever happens. He just happens to have a wild imagination and an interesting trip into the woods.

Categories: General Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 2166; Read Count: 443; Completed: Yes

Updated: 06/02/07; Published: 06/02/07
Reviewer: apollo13 (Signed)
02/10/07

Interesting - it's certainly an orginal and entertaining story. My only crit would be that he is maybe a little old for the type of things he was doing (slaying a dragon and such). My sister is ten, and her and the rest of the kid's in her class are a little more grown up - that's not to say that they don't have imaginary games, but the games are a little more sophisticated. He reminds me more of an eight year old.

~Evie




Chapter 1: Stick to a Sword
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Katheryn Marlow has been condemned a heretic and a Witch, to suffer and be burned at the stake upon St. Valentine's Day. In the small hours of the night, as she contemplates her fate, Katheryn receives an unexpected visitor who brings a gift most precious.

Categories: General Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1881; Read Count: 287; Completed: Yes

Updated: 13/02/07; Published: 13/02/07
Reviewer: apollo13 (Signed)
16/08/07

This was a really good fic - that bit when she was waiting to be tortured... **shudder**

It was well written, and the imagry and emotions of the fic came through really well. And I love your title, it really caught my eye! :D

~Evie




Chapter 1: Thy Gentle Loving Friend
Past Featured Story

Young love in a treehouse, written for the Valentine's Day challenge



Categories: General Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1954; Read Count: 824; Completed: No

Updated: 14/02/07; Published: 14/02/07
Reviewer: apollo13 (Signed)
24/08/07

Awww! Kid's can be so cruel! That's really cute and sad at the same time. The poor little girl! I loved your style of writing in this, it made it clear that they were young children without actually saying, they were six, they were seven, ectr.

It reminded me a lot of when I was a little girl and I said I was in love with a boy in my class. LOL! They all laughed and I was so embarressed!

Wonderful story!

~Evie




Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Olivia and Stewart are a busy upperclass couple with a lot going on in their lives. Watch as they try to make it through Valentine's Day while dealing with each other's quirks.

Categories: General Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1431; Read Count: 780; Completed: Yes

Updated: 14/02/07; Published: 14/02/07
Reviewer: apollo13 (Signed)
27/07/07

Poor Stewart!!

Hi, Niki, it's nice to see you outside of MNFF! :D

I love this story - I felt really sorry for Stewart; he was trying his best! Maybe he's better off without her. :p

I liked how it wasn't just one massive thing that split them up, it was loads of little things - it made it more realistic.

I liked Stewarts character as well - his reactions seemed real. And I thought that Olivia was being very selfish.

~Evie




Chapter 1: Chapter 1
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In defiance of Emperor Marcus Aurelius Claudius II's explicit order, young bishop Valentinius continues to perform marriage ceremonies for young Christians in Rome. Will these young couples live to enjoy their troth, and will Valentinius find a love of his own before his life is ended?



Categories: General Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1238; Read Count: 283; Completed: No

Updated: 14/02/07; Published: 14/02/07
Reviewer: apollo13 (Signed)
18/08/07

I thought thisflowed really well,it was a beautifulpiece of work.

I'm a history geek and so anything historical interests me, but this fic really drew me in.

It's very tragic and sad, but also very hopeful and inspiring as well, which is always good to see. :)

~Evie




Chapter 1: The Secret Wedding
No Good Deed by Caitlin Tam [Young Teen]
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Philippines, 1896. A young man named Antonio is forced to choose between his family and his country during the biggest revolt in Philippine history.

Categories: General Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 2639; Read Count: 603; Completed: No

Updated: 09/03/07; Published: 08/03/07
Reviewer: apollo13 (Signed)
21/08/07

What a brilliant first chapter! I look forward to reading more!

 

~Evie




Chapter 1: Circumvention
Welcome to the world of Alexandra Collins.  Alex is a teenage girl and high school student who fancies herself an investigator of sorts.  If Alex sees something mildly suspicious (even if the suspicion is imagined), she's likely to recruite her two best friends and begin investigating.  So, what does Alex do when she sees the most popular girl in school sneaking out of the gym?  She comes up with a plan and puts her not-so-great detecting skills to use, of course!

Categories: General Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 4 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 5083; Read Count: 4336; Completed: Yes

Updated: 17/06/07; Published: 31/03/07
Reviewer: apollo13 (Signed)
16/08/07

lol, I love Alex's character already! :D And I know so many Samantha's...

Great so far, on to the next chapter! :D

~Evie



Author's Response:

I'm glad you like Alex! She's a handful to write though. It's always amusing to see what she comes up with. I also know a quite a few Samantha's. Not my favorite type of person. Enjoy the rest!

~Catherine




Chapter 1: Chapter One: Criminal Activity
Reviewer: apollo13 (Signed)
16/08/07

I like this story - it's really funny! :D And, even though it's about an American High School and I'm not American, I can totally relate to it. :D

 ~Evie



Author's Response:

Thanks!

"And, even though it's about an American High School and I'm not American, I can totally relate to it."

Wow, I'm a little impressed by myself. Lol.

~Catherine




Chapter 2: Chapter Two: Time for a Plan
Reviewer: apollo13 (Signed)
16/08/07

I'm seriously in a fit of giggles here! I dread to think what "Operation Alliteration" is!

Good work, again!

~Evie



Author's Response:

Poor Amy, her plans never seem to work out. But she doesn't let that get her down. She just comes up with a new one. Which usually fails too. It's a cycle of sorts. Glad you like it!

~Catherine



Author's Response:

Oops! I meant Alex. Her name was Amy originally. :)

~Catherine




Chapter 3: Chapter Three: Another Failed Plan
Reviewer: apollo13 (Signed)
16/08/07

Aaaah, what a wonderful story. I'm quite sad it's over. Coughsequelcough.

You've created some very real characters here, and a brilliant, amusing story.

Well done! :D

~Evie



Author's Response:

Thank you for all the wonderful compliments! Sequel you say (er, cough)? I actually never considered it until now. I'll speak to Alex about it . . .  :)

~Catherine




Chapter 4: Chapter Four: Back to School Bash
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The sunshine in Florida is often equated with happiness, but Deahna would rather the weather reflected her mood.

 

May General Challenge entry



Categories: May Challenge; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1384; Read Count: 263; Completed: Yes

Updated: 01/06/07; Published: 31/05/07
Reviewer: apollo13 (Signed)
31/07/07

Wow, this is a really deep, rather moving piece. You can really see the torment and confusion of the character. I love how there is no dialogue or action in the fic, and it's all thought - this is something hard to pull off, but it works really well.

I really hope that Bryan takes her back!! :D

~Evie




Chapter 1: This is my life
Monsters by Puffling [Adult]
starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3]

Monsters

What haunts you?”

Not all monsters live in storybooks. Some are very real, and some can even dwell in our minds.



Categories: Horror Fiction, May Challenge; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1963; Read Count: 238; Completed: Yes

Updated: 05/06/07; Published: 04/06/07
Reviewer: apollo13 (Signed)
31/07/07

**shudder** That's quyite creepy. Ms Briar sounds very scary. I thought you did a really good job of describing the asylum, and you handle the abuse she went through very well.

~Evie




Chapter 1: Monsters
I am only fourteen, and already my life has been changed irreversibly. I no longer trust my family; they betrayed me. Read my story here.


Categories: General Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 2239; Read Count: 655; Completed: Yes

Updated: 19/06/07; Published: 19/06/07
Reviewer: apollo13 (Signed)
16/08/07

I really like this story. It's very hopeful, even if it does seem a little rushed at parts. I liked how Emily was able to move on at the end. :)

~Evie




Chapter 1: But What Do You Do With the Survivors?
And he touches her hand, and traces the lines. He murmurs his love and expresses that he wishes she was still there.

Categories: General Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 878; Read Count: 631; Completed: Yes

Updated: 28/06/07; Published: 27/06/07
Reviewer: apollo13 (Signed)
31/07/07

That's so sad! Seriously, you nearly had me in tears over it! I loved the nice little "homey" touches you added - sandwiches cut in the triangle way was pure genius.

When I first read the summary I thought this was a romance story! :o But I still love this fic. I feel so sorry for the character, he obviously had a strong relationship with his mother. I thought you brought the pain and sadness of his emotions through in the writing very well, and it was a really nice touch that there was no dialogue.

:)

~Evie



Author's Response:

Thank you so much! I'm so happy to have gotten a review! I was hoping for it to come off as a sort of eye dabber and I'm excited that you felt what I was hoping the readers would!

 Thanks again Evie!

-Mackenzie

 




Chapter 1: With the Stars
Crystal Fantasy by LadyMortis [Young Teen]
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Feature

Sometimes, when I close my eyes, I am in another place, another time; a place where the constant hardships of life cannot interrupt the calm serenity of my fantasy.

A woman, suffering the many hardships of life, has become cynical of humanity and all it entails. Caught in the endless terrors the world seems to conjure, she is beginning to lose faith in man. Then she meets Keiran.

"Your tears bring hope that one day, enough tears will have been shed to end this seeming eternal war"

Keiran, the wind sage of Utopia, is a figment of her imagination. Yet as their relationship strengthens and grows, she begins to wonder where the line is that seperates reality and fantasy and if it can be blurred until they are one and the same.



Categories: July Challenge, Fantasy Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 3015; Read Count: 996; Completed: Yes

Updated: 08/07/07; Published: 06/07/07
Reviewer: apollo13 (Signed)
31/07/07

Wow, I love this fic - I really like the description, and the powerful words. I thought it was so sad when she lost her baby! :(

It's a really dark fic, but I really enjoyed it, and would love to read more.

~Evie



Author's Response: I am glad you enjoed it and I appreciate the review



Chapter 1: Hope, Faith and Love
The Atlantis Chronicles by Naga [Young Adult]
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The previously untold story of Atlantis from its conception to the bitter end.

Categories: General Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 821; Read Count: 241; Completed: No

Updated: 08/07/07; Published: 08/07/07
Reviewer: apollo13 (Signed)
31/07/07

I can't wait to read more! I love the old language you use - it adds a certain sense of mystery and magic to it.

The style of writing you use really makes me think of LOTR - an epic, mysterious type story. :)

~Evie




Chapter 1: The Creation
Impossible by Lady Apostrophe [Young Teen]
starstarstarstar [Reviews - 4]

Her smile was unchanging, but her eyes became oddly unfocused.

Sunshine, smiles, and poolside laughter can be unsettlingly deceiving.



Categories: General Fiction, July Challenge; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1453; Read Count: 775; Completed: Yes

Updated: 16/07/07; Published: 16/07/07
Reviewer: apollo13 (Signed)
27/07/07

oooooooh, creepy! Wow, this was really good. I kinda guessed that the little girl had been abducted, but it still had a good effect. Good job - I'd love to read more, though!

~Evie



Author's Response: "Creepy"...that's what I was hoping for! Yeah, it's a bit short, but I think I got out all I needed to write about. : ) Thank you so much for the review!



Chapter 1: Impossible
An entire world exists that we are un-aware of. Unfortunatly, a rather simple girl is about to be lured into it.

Categories: Horror Fiction, July Challenge; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1391; Read Count: 742; Completed: Yes

Updated: 29/07/07; Published: 29/07/07
Reviewer: apollo13 (Signed)
31/07/07

You know what's most creepy about this for me? I went to London recently with my mates and we went in one of the underground foot tunnels.

**screams**

Anyways, I love this fic - it's definately creepy and would make an awesome movie. I love your description - especially the market. I'd love to see a spin off with Ezlener - he sounds so cool! :)

~Evie



Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm really glad you liked it.



Chapter 1: Chapter 1
She reflects on the good times and the bad times and what she loved and lost, and the park has been there to see it all.

Categories: General Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 1 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 1228; Read Count: 711; Completed: Yes

Updated: 07/08/07; Published: 02/08/07
Reviewer: apollo13 (Signed)
13/08/07

What a sad ending! This was a beautiful fic, I loved the descriptions (and I'm hard to please with descriptions) and I felt really captured in the story.

Job well done! :)

~Evie



Author's Response:

Thank you for the nice review, I'm honored to have such a talented writer such as yourself reading my lowly works!




Chapter 1: The Park
A young woman finds herself tangled in the technicalities of religion where everything she believed about Heaven and Hell changes in just one final breath.

Categories: General Fiction; Characters: None; Chapters: 7 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 12355; Read Count: 1827; Completed: No

Updated: 10/03/09; Published: 10/08/07
Reviewer: apollo13 (Signed)
28/09/07

ooooooh, I love this story! I can't wait for the next chapter - I'm in suspense! Keep up the good work!

~Evie



Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Chapter 4 will be on its way soon!



Heaven and Hell