Reviews For Ten Green Bottles

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Reviewer: Celtic_Jewel (Signed)
21/03/08 - 04:05 pm

Evie, that was scary. I've stopped my sisters singing that song now. *runs away and hides under the bed*

 

-Ema :p 



Author's Response:

Aw, Ema!! :D Glad you liked it!! Kinda... :p

 

~Evie




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Reviewer: sierraquill1715 (Signed)
05/03/08 - 12:40 pm
oh hey wanted to write some more about it... my 14 year old bro keeps asking me what happened to the kids... lol.... i definitely agree with all the previous reviewers... u've presented the opening scene amazing well! It's soo---- image-ey... lol... spookie!

Author's Response:

Hee hee - I don't think even I know what's happening to all the kids - I changed my mind sop many times, from cheesy happy endings to really disturbing endings, but none of them worked, so I thought I'd let you wonder. ;)

 

~Evie




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Reviewer: sierraquill1715 (Signed)
05/03/08 - 12:36 pm
Omigawd... amazingly disturbing ^_^ I lyk it!!!

Author's Response: Lol, danke. :)



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Reviewer: Lady Apostrophe (Signed)
30/08/07 - 07:14 pm

I absolutely adored this story. It was written very well! I liked the simple style, as well as the different sections telling about each abduction.

My favorite thing, though, about it as a whole is how eerie and addicting the beginning is, and how, gradually, the settings of the abductions become less eerie but still so dangerous. Honestly, the beginning was what hooked me... The imagery was perfect, and I had this incredibly creepy but really vivid picture in my head of a little girl in white on these rocky cliffs, her hair blowing in the wind, and I could literally hear her childish voice singing and I got chills. And then there were the woods, an equally creepy setting. But once you get to a nursery school and a grocery store, for God's sake, you begin to feel that sense of complete hopelessness. Like the children aren't safe anywhere anymore. I loved it!

Awesome job! Though I was yearning to find out more about this monster... *shudders* Anyway, really good work.



Author's Response:

**grins** Thank you! That was what I was trying to do - make each one more and more casual as we went along, and I'm glad you picked up on it.

Thank you for your review! :D

~Evie




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Reviewer: thecrimsonwhisperer (Signed)
20/08/07 - 01:07 am
Woah, talk about super creepy...it reminds me of the beginning of Pirates 3 when they are singing that song and the little boy at the beginning...you'll know what I mean if you've seen it...but yeah, well written definitely gripped my attention from beginning to end. I was a little annoyed because I want to know what it is taking all the kids but I don't think the story would be any better if you actually said and might actually detract from the eerie feeling. But anyway, well done, great story!

Author's Response:

Yay! :D Creepy, just what I wanted! :D Yeah, I was going to put what/who was taking the kid's, but it didn't really work and then I was thinking about the Blair witch and how you never actually see it and I just thought it'd be better without.

Yes, I've seen POTC3 ;) but it was more the Devils Footsteps I was thinking about when I wrote it, if you've ever read that. Very good book.

Glad you liked it!

~Evie




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Reviewer: Rynn (Signed)
19/08/07 - 08:48 am

I loved that! It felt creepy, like the feeling you get when you see Armageddon or something...I wonder just what our little snatcher is, though...

 One thing confused me.  Ashley and Ethan.  Is Ashley a boy's name? And the part with the teddy bear, you said he grabbed his sister's teddy bear.  What was that about.



Author's Response:

Yes, Ashley is very much a boys name in England. It can be a girls name, but more often than not it's a boys name, contrary to America. ;) Maybe I should of used a different name, sorry!

I said sisters teddy bear because they have a sister, though she doesn't appear in the story I just thought it'd be weird for two teenage boys to have a teddy-bear. :p

I'm glad you like the story!

~Evie




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Reviewer: Aohd Rose (Signed)
17/08/07 - 01:26 am
Very neat! That was a bit creepy, wasn't it? Scary boogey man called by the sound of a haunting nursery rhyme... Very well done! Can you tell me more about his creepy boogeyman person? The choosing of the song was great...my little sister and I started singing it together when I began to read this and sing it under my breath. We stopped because she had to go to bed, but by the time i finished I wanted to look over my shoulder, or go check on her. I did. This was fantastic! Good job!

Author's Response:

lol, that's the effect I wanted! :D

Thanks for reading and reviewing.

~Evie




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