I like the start of this story, and you've already established Candice as a character who is very real.
However, I was a bit confused as to why she didn't take the bus - didn't she have enough money? Also, this bit:
And no offense but I really could hurt you if I wanted to and not just with my bike, especially if you wern't paying attention,
I dunno, it just sounded... wrong to me. Not quite right. Very bookish, and not very real. Also, there should be a comma after offense.
Other than those two nit-picks, I really liked it and I look forward to future chapters. :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! Sorry it took me so long to respond, half of it is because that "section" that bothered you bothered me too but I still wanted the point to be made, so I toyed around with it a little and hopefully it sounds better now. As for why she didn't take the bus...she just preferred walking, I might clarify that as well though I haven't yet. But thank you so much for the helpful response and I look forward to your future reviews!