Have I said yet how wonderful this fiction is? Here I go again:
First, I can tell you put effort into this piece. I, contrarily, pull stories out of my butt too often. I appreciate the history, and really, you touch a spot of my heart with including history at all.
I loved the subtle reminders of context, about Christian 'churches', about the emporer. The dress and the ceremony itself was all researched and felt very real. (I watch the History channel a lot, and truthfully, I saw a movie of this in my mind's eye).
I would say, as a critique, that you could have gone further with this story. It was very nicely packed up, but I think you could have infused more fiction into the fiction. If that makes sense? Perhaps it's the drama I like, but I wouldn't have minded seeing Val's bastard child. >.>
If you could win the challenge, I'd vote for you. >.>
Author's Response: Well, Lexie...the story isn't finished yet, lol! Though I can safely say that there will be no bastard children. I'm currently planning 2-3 more short chapters before the end of this work.
The Secret Wedding