Awww! Kid's can be so cruel! That's really cute and sad at the same time. The poor little girl! I loved your style of writing in this, it made it clear that they were young children without actually saying, they were six, they were seven, ectr.

It reminded me a lot of when I was a little girl and I said I was in love with a boy in my class. LOL! They all laughed and I was so embarressed!

Wonderful story!

~Evie

I have to agree with everyone else: It was a wonderfully written story. So sweet and charming. I do feel sorry for the little girl, though. Children can be cruel, can't they?

 Anyways, can't wait for you to write another story. Hopefully one as brilliant as this. 

I LOVED this story!  It's so innocent and sweet.  Honestly, I would believe you have a little girl of your own with this writing.  The wording was chosen carefully to be sure it sounded like it was coming from a young mind, and I think it really brought the reader in.  I remembered the days when I would play all day, and things like coloring in the lines mattered to me.

 I just think this story is brilliant.  Thanks for it!

awww. What a sad story... I f I wasn't at school with alot of people I might of cried.

:( Poor girl... All these bad Valentine's Days are making me depressed... and yet off I go to read some more.

Good job

Oooh!  I love this story!  It's so sweet...her preparations for his special Valentine's Day present, her memories of their times together as well as their "wedding" - it was all very well done.

The end was so sad!  Perhaps because most women can remember an experience like that as a little girl...perhaps because you wrote her heartbreak so well.

I'm very impressed!  Good luck in the challenge!