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Reviewer: apollo13 (Signed)
02/10/07 - 03:15 pm

Interesting - it's certainly an orginal and entertaining story. My only crit would be that he is maybe a little old for the type of things he was doing (slaying a dragon and such). My sister is ten, and her and the rest of the kid's in her class are a little more grown up - that's not to say that they don't have imaginary games, but the games are a little more sophisticated. He reminds me more of an eight year old.

~Evie




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Reviewer: Mariana (Signed)
07/02/07 - 05:42 pm
I think what I liked best about this story is the way you kept me guessing about the castle.  You showed Garret's imagination in play with the dragon and the sword, and when you moved on to the castle, I assumed it was more of his imagination.  But it was just slightly off... why would he be surprised by the lack of people?  Was he really touching the walls?  Then you had him pretend to be the guard and I was convinced the castle was his imagination again, but then Alden came and turned it all around.  I love it when a story can trick me and have me wondering what's real or not.  Great job!

Author's Response: I was so worried that people would be TOO confused because of my switching back and forth between reality and imagination. It's good to know that at least you weren't. Thanks so much for the review. I really am glad that you liked the story. :)



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Reviewer: Oracle (Anonymous)
07/02/07 - 09:06 am

This story looks as though it is going to be quite intruiging.  I'm interested in and a little suspicious of Alden, but perhaps that's just my paranoid nature!  I was enjoying the story of a little boy lost in his fancies...and then when Alden came along, I suddenly wondered what was lying beneath the surface.

Keep up the writing! My only suggestion is that when you do descriptions, keep them to what the characters are able to see.

I can't wait to read more! 



Author's Response: I'll put up the other story in a while when this one has a few more reads :) Thanks for the review!



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