This was a cute fic, but I kind of felt like you added a bunch of unecassary information. The story basically is a basic ship of H/G and Hr/R, but you don't say anything about their feelings for each other. You surprise us in the end... And although we may already be aware of the relationships between the two couples, you still have to be aware of your reader. Your reader wont enjoy a story that clearly states "you know more than they do", the reader likes to feel as though they're on the same level as you are. But I think this is great. Nice job!
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