Yikes!! Poor Remus! That was a heck of a story... Man. knwoing that he was the one, no matter howe he could not help it, that made mbridge such a.... Not that she is right in what she does, of coruse... I lked the premise of this story very much.
If I were to offer some constructive critisicm, I would mention the clarity of the story. It was a little confusing...sometimes i coudlnt; quite tell what you were inferring, and it took a couple of readings to find out how Padfoot and the others figured into this story until I realized that Lupin was the werewolf. A little less mystery might make the story more real to the reader.
But again, wonderful story, great mood setting and very realistic emotions and characterization.
Author's Response: Pookey,
Thank you very much for having thought about writinga review for my story. I appreciate you "forgiving" me because of mistakes I have done and I wouldn't possibly have been able to avoid.
As for your suggestions... I don't know, but Idon't think that Dolores finding out that Lupin was the one to blame would have worked. She would have just killed Remus, or started to persecute him. I prefer to leave the future to the reader, and make the reader decide if Dolores WILL know, and what her reaction would be.
As for my bio, I'm sorry if you thought it was so "poorly written". Maybe I made a few prepositions' and grammar mistakes there, BUT I'm always a non native English speaker, and I didn't know I would have been required to have my wonderful beta reader beta even my BIO, for goodness' sake!
Thank you for your comment anyway. And forgive me if I say that it didn't make my day.