Reviews For Dolores' Sorrow

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Reviewer: Golden_Snitch (Signed)
05/06/2006 06:22 pm
Ouch! Very interesting thoughts and a nicely put together story. Clearly written, too. Never thought that would happen!!! : v )


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Reviewer: Cody DeDannan (Signed)
04/16/2006 01:39 am

Yikes!! Poor Remus!  That was a heck of a story...  Man.  knwoing that he was the one, no matter howe he could not help it, that made mbridge such a....  Not that she is right in what she does, of coruse...  I lked the premise of this story very much.

 If I were to offer some constructive critisicm, I would mention the clarity of the story.  It was a little confusing...sometimes i coudlnt; quite tell what you were inferring, and it took a couple of readings to find out how Padfoot and the others figured into this story until I realized that Lupin was the werewolf.  A little less mystery might make the story more real to the reader.

 

But again, wonderful story, great mood setting and very realistic emotions and characterization. 




Dolores' Sorrow
Reviewer: Madeline Fabray (Signed)
02/01/2006 11:43 pm
You did an excellent job in creating some pity for Umbridge, not an easy task, but still keeping her a loathsome little toad. I was not expecting the twist with Remus, although I often suspected his answer in the Shrieking Shack about not harming anyone. How would he remember? Well done!


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Reviewer: Desslok (Signed)
09/29/2005 05:29 pm
Interesting story. Very different from the usual fare and very well written. As if poor Remus needed any more misery in his life..... Good job taking a very two-dimensional easily-hated character and giving her some depth, while not redeeming her.


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Reviewer: pookey (Anonymous)
08/24/2005 01:06 am
A great story for the most part, but the truth serum plot should not have been given away before she tried it on Lupin. The story would have played better and had more edge if you had let her serve him the truth serum. You had good descriptions of the conditions outside like the weather and such but it lost realism when Lupin didn't hate her more for what she did not only to him, but to Harry as well. As it was written before HBP, that can be forgiven. I was surprised when I read your bio which was so poorly written to find your story actually had some merit and was worth reading.

Author's Response: Pookey,

Thank you very much for having thought about writinga review for my story. I appreciate you "forgiving" me because of mistakes I have done and I wouldn't possibly have been able to avoid.

As for your suggestions... I don't know, but Idon't think that Dolores finding out that Lupin was the one to blame would have worked. She would have just killed Remus, or started to persecute him. I prefer to leave the future to the reader, and make the reader decide if Dolores WILL know, and what her reaction would be.

As for my bio, I'm sorry if you thought it was so "poorly written". Maybe I made a few prepositions' and grammar mistakes there, BUT I'm always a non native English speaker, and I didn't know I would have been required to have my wonderful beta reader beta even my BIO, for goodness' sake!

Thank you for your comment anyway. And forgive me if I say that it didn't make my day.



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