You must login (register) to review.

Reviewer: YelloWitchGrl (Signed)
10/05/2005 02:58 pm
Hi there! Okay, just a small thing that helps a lot is if you seperate the talking, like creating a new paragraph. It helps the reader realize that a new person is talking. Otherwise, good job! :-)


Arrival at the Barrow
Reviewer: YelloWitchGrl (Signed)
09/11/2005 07:09 pm
Interesting begining and I'm always looking for more H/G moments, of course. One thing I noticed is that you dont' always capitalize names when you should. This site offers beta help for free so please don't hesitate to use it! Good job again :-)


Back to the Dursleys
You must login (register) to review.