Hilarious story. Ron's "love letter" is particularly great. I think you could drop the last few paragraphs and end with Hermione telling him about the weekend and perhaps Ron thinking something like "That's what I get for agreeing with Malfoy" while Draco thinks "That's what I get for helping a Weasley" or something like that. I really like your take on Draco in this, esp in the candy store. Great job and thanks for writing it!
Ron Weasley, Official Gryffindor Matchmaker