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Reviewer: YelloWitchGrl (Signed)
10/11/2005 06:17 pm
Very sweet! Thank you for sharing. :-)


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Reviewer: Desslok (Signed)
09/28/2005 04:02 pm
Excellent story... very touching! I love the image of Harry carrying her to bed and tucking her in for the night. The imagery throughout this story is really wonderful. I can absolutely see her on that couch with him kneeling down by her face. I like that she steals his clothing too. :) A couple minor nits: the "You guessed it" at the beginning is jarring. There's no need for it and it takes the reader out of the narrative flow. Also, it seems like the issue of her mother's doubts about her future is never really resolved. I guess I thought it would be more of an issue or a theme, rather than just the excuse for her to go downstairs. These are minor things, though. All in all, a great job! Very sweet!


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Reviewer: lauren (Anonymous)
08/08/2005 05:37 pm
aww that was really cute/good ! keep up the good work!


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