there were parts of the chapter that i loved and some parts that left me a bit confused
i loved the HP girl fan club thing.... i can picture a bunch of teenage girls drooling over harry and him feeling all weird about it
Snape is a bit confusing. Considering that he wanted to murder Harry after Harry checked out his memory, he actually is having a civilized conversation with him in the book. As much as you said Harry grew up after book5 he and Snape would still loath each other. Harry blames Snape for Sirius's death and Snape blames Harry for existing
But a very well written chapter. Sorry about the concrit. It's something I always do
I don't remember which chapter you're on, but at various times in canon and in my fics, Snape actually HELPS Harry, despite their mutual distrust and loathing, so Harry, as he matures, goes from simple loathing to a bit of confusion about the man, justifiably so, I think. Snape's behavior isn't consistant with that of a mortal enemy. Sometimes he HELPS, such as when he saved Harry from falling off the broom in PS/SS. I'm just building on that, adding to the confusion, because I find it quite interesting. You'll see that as you go on through the stories.
Glad you're enjoying it! And your crit wasn't nearly as nasty as a lot I've had. Thanks for the "sorry" though - those who are the most bloodthirsty never bother to think that there's a living, breathing person on the other end of this computer screen who might be hurt by what they said. I appreciate your consideration!
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