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Reviewer: OpenSecret_xox (Signed)
07/29/2009 04:01 pm

Heyy.. I also really like the twists and turns! ^_^ .. Also how you asked directly towards the readers with questions. As well as changing the font style for some words which was really well done. But there was a time when the codes was visible (<I>please</I>). However, other than that, wonderful.

A great ending too, even though it was tragic that she had died accidently.. & to add onto that, who would have guessed that she was pregnant?!? Speaking of which, your story really made me read on till the very end. ^_^



Author's Response:

just saw this one sorry.  thank you for the review I'm glad you liked it.  I'll see if I can fix those coding errors.




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Reviewer: Ghostlymagic (Signed)
06/24/2009 05:41 am

I like the many twists and turns, and the way that you were kept guessing until the very end. It was also a very satisfactory ending. On the whole it was fairly well written. The spelling and grammar was good.

However, on the second last line I don't agree with your use of a semi-colon, but that might just be me.



Author's Response:

Thanks, I had alot of fun writing this one.  It went to a beta reader who changes alot of my punctuation (because my grammar skills are not up to par) so I probably had a comma there in the beginning who knows.  Glad you enjoyed it and thanks for the review.




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