While WT did start as an HP fanfic site we have expanded to the other fandoms so don't sell yourself short. If you get a good hook (like yiou last line) then you will pull the raders in by word of mouth. Jump on the forms and make some friends and spread the word about your story and that will also bring in more readers.
I like the way you have started this out but it is a tiny bit too much like the actual story. You did however to add enough little details to make it your own. I am interested in seeing where you take this story so I will keep watching for the updates.
Author's Response: I know it's pretty similar to the story, my moderator commented on that. The problem is, I can't start changing things left, right and centre straight off the mark, or the story will seem unrealistic. I think you'll find that as we get further into the story, it'll deviate more from the books. Thanks for the review and the advice.
Prologue - One Slight Alteration