Wonderful job! You write with such beautiful language and emotion. I loved how you examined Snape's feelings through these flashbacks; my only suggestion would be to make the flashbacks longer and really get more into the scenes with Mary, Charity, and even Dumbledore, since you wrote them so well I wanted to read more. But I know that probably wasn't your intent: the short vignettes worked nicely too. The candles tying everything together were fantastic. You really understand this character and write very well! ~Gina :)
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