Oooh, I loved seeing this scene from Edward's PoV. I think you did a wonderful job capturing his emotions and thoughts. Great job!
Oh, I adored this! You did a wonderful job taking this canon moment and turning it inside out.
Every thought you gave Edward was not only plausible, but very much in "his voice". How he marvelled at her lover ooking his nature, but fearing the mundane world... How he realised that he actually loved her... How he warred between both hungers...
I was definitely left wanting more from Edward's POV! Excellent work!
This was a wonderful little glimpse into Edwards mind. You did a very good of keeping them in character and following the true storyline. Great job.