Very nice! I've read this scene before, and even written it myself, and I enjoyed reading yours. The teasing at the end was good, I think that there would be a lot of laughter in their relationship, starting from the beginning. Good job! ~Gina :)

I liked this little missing moment story.  It's cute, and it's sweet, and I think you've captured Harry's feelings of happiness and relief very well.  The only thing I wonder about is the "Will you be my girlfriend?" question.  Maybe I'm too far out of high school...do people still ask that question?