Very nice! I've read this scene before, and even written it myself, and I enjoyed reading yours. The teasing at the end was good, I think that there would be a lot of laughter in their relationship, starting from the beginning. Good job! ~Gina :)
I liked this little missing moment story. It's cute, and it's sweet, and I think you've captured Harry's feelings of happiness and relief very well. The only thing I wonder about is the "Will you be my girlfriend?" question. Maybe I'm too far out of high school...do people still ask that question?
Author's Response: You know, I have no idea! When I asked Jon (yes, I was the one who asked him) I did ask if he would be my boyfriend, so it seemed natural for me to use that in this story. Maybe I'm out of the loop too! :D