I was pretty teary eyed by the end of this one, I feel so bad for Laela.

This chapter was beautiful.  The history you created with the people is stunning and I really enjoyed this.

wow what a daring escape and such a brutal death sentance

This chapter was an excellent rendtion of how the transformation used to take place.  The only part that seemed out of place was the "machine" used to make the tattoos.  It seemed way to modern even with the key turning. Tats used to be made by carbin into the skin with a blade and rubbing the ink into them.  This would be a more fitting scenerio for the time frame.

Poor Laela, she suffers from 'girly syndrome" she must have shiny things.

oh no this is the same as the last chapter

I liked your version of the blood oath celebration and how you made him an outcast instead of excelling at everything.  While his farith was good it angered everyone who saw it.  I also liked how Flell and Galbatorix finally came together.

I really liked this one, I could feel them flying through the air I felt like I was right there with them. Great job.

What a great idea you had, the two of them being so merged that they became one. It was and exhilerating chapter.

your writing skills are so good, everyting you write could esily fit into the actualy books.  I love the banter between Laela and Galbatorix they seem like a perfect match.

~Kristy