Just wanted to let you know that I reviewed as d_jinkies, instead of jinkies_07...once again, loved the ending!!!
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked the ending. I originally planned for Kelly to stay, but I decided I couldn't punish her like that. But yes, Kelly's life did get better after she left. Just about anything would be better than staying on the island.
Author's Response: Thanks! I really like Kelly; Sirius really does need a friend he can talk to without getting involved in the whole "criminal" thing. I don't know when the next chapter will be, since my beta's kind of lazy.... Hopefully it'll be soon.
I love the idea that Buckbeak's dual nature (as horse and hawk) is explained away as just the fact that all the eyewitnesses are druggies.
I'm a little confused about Sirius' comments on the articles he reads:
"He knew for certain that the Dark Arts were brewing in Tibet, [how did he know if he's been in Azkaban all these years?] and yet there had been a number of strange occurrences in Albania of all places. [Why not Albania?] It was too consistent [what was?] to simply be a coincidence.
What few concrete facts Sirius was able to glean from the articles were too consistent with what he knew to be a coincidence. Albania couldn’t possibly be a hot spot for affairs, could it? [Still can't understand why.] How often could someone disappear from their hotel room in the middle of the night without any sign of a struggle? And not only were the disappearances unaccounted for, nearly all of the victims were people that Sirius knew were ardently against the Dark Arts. [I just think maybe this should be explained better. I know there's supposed to be a mystery to it, but it'sstill hard to follow.
Otherwise, I love Sirius' verbal tussle with Mme. Wright. Another interesting character And the vigilante justice! Whoa, I'm glad I don't live there!
Ah, yeah: the article. The way I see it, Sirius has been reading all sorts of papers from the past few years, so he's picked up on a few things from other articles. He knows for certain, because, well, he seems like he knows when he's right. I said Albania because that's where Voldemort was rumored to have been hiding as Vapormort for several years.
I can try to make that part a little clearer, but I may leave it as is, seeing as I have a tendency to beat dead horses when I write.
I have to give half of the credit to my beta. I came up with Wright's character, but I can't get her dialogue right so save my life. So Kash (the beta) has done most of it.
I'll take full credit for the druggy allegations though. How could all those cons and loons really be clean, eh? *cheesy grin*
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review! I'm glad you're enjoying things. Sadly, the next chapter is the last one. Although it may be a while, seeing as my beta's pretty busy lately.
I'm surprised there are no reviews for this. You've captured the island setting very well and populated it with intriguing characters. Kelly, Chris, and Burt are very realistic, but...well...different from the run-of-the-mill Potter fic, and very much the type of ordinary people with extraordinary, pent-up emotions one encounters on islands and in isolated small towns.
I especially liked the action part with Al trying to bludgeon Sirius. You set it up very well with the breathing and all, though I don't know if Sirius would have been able to distinguish the color of Al's eyes at such a distance and by moonlight.
I like your humor too and your takes on Sirius' thoughts, which you put across with a phrasing that is uniquely your own:
He hated the stars; they were just as callous as his estranged family.
He had...lived within his own nightmares for over a decade; a few trees were hardly going to get the best of him.
...a deranged Muggle with a hammer wasn’t going to stop him if a highly skilled Death Eater with a wand couldn’t.
And that last line is quite a teaser.
Thanks! I'm glad my characters don't seem too unrealistic. I know they're all more or less insane (or at least a little eccentric), but I'd hoped they didn't come across as complete physcopaths.
And you're right, in reality, Sirius wouldn't have been able to see Al's eye color, but I thought it made the whole mysterious attacker thing a little more lively.
Thanks so much for the review!