I love your many similies to describethis girl's life. They add immense detail and make the story all the more interesting.

Typically, I tend to read stories with some dialogue, as I like to read that kind of thing for some reason...but the way you wrote this was incredible, even if shorter than many stories.

Also, I like how you can make the root of her misery gravity. It is a unique soure - rather than a verbal fight with a friend or something.

I do hope you continue the story soon, as I cannot wait to see if she flies. ;)

Good job,
-Patrick