Interesting story, but your main character is quite the Mary Sue. Be careful to keep your characters realistic so that your story stays believable!
Author's Response: Thanks! And yes, the story was completed in 2003. There are 36 chapters. I'm just about to wrap up ch 14 of the sequel. To be honest, the first several chapters absolutely suck. I'm revising them and am currently working on ch 6, but I still hate them. The story, and the writing, definately improve, so keep reading! Thanks for my first review!