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Reviewer: LunaMoon224 (Signed)
12/23/2006 07:42 pm
I liked the summary to this, along with the 'forks' quote. It made me giggle. Two things I noticed, though, were that it didn't flow as well as I would have hoped, and the second half wasn't as interesting as I would have expected. Kind of made me want to skip the second half. Also, I enjoyed the first line--makes you want to read more. Nice job with this!


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Reviewer: mugglenet27 (Signed)
12/23/2006 07:24 pm
That was quite interesting.  I rather enjoyed that!  You have a wonderful way with words and a real talent for description.  Keep writing!  :D


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