Reviews For Passing the Torch

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Reviewer: Orual (Signed)
09/02/2006 11:05 pm

On the whole, you did a very nice job with this chapter.  I find Matt's bounciness endearing, though he played a rather small role in this chapter.  My only complaint is that I think you lost a little bit of Harry's character with: “No, not many would have done what you and your family did. I know plenty of people that would have cracked another one of my ribs and left me there. No one would take a stranger into their home.”  It just seemed unnecessarily angsty.  But you are the author.  

If you still need a beta reader, you can email me at  You can usually expect same day feedback from me.  I don't consider myself harsh, but I am critical, so be forewarned.

Author's Response:

Thanks for the review! Don't worry about Matt's minor role. He is definately a character that i have plans for. this chapter was an intro to my OC's, some setting intro, and a bit of relationship development between Harry and Kaycee. Expect more action in the future.

You're right. Perhaps it was out of character, but i wanted the Pearsons to have a slight hint at Harry's past life. Thanks again! 

Pearsons in the Forest
Reviewer: Lionz_4_the_Cup (Signed)
08/29/2006 06:19 pm
That was a really good first chapter. Awesome descriptions. Can't wait to see what happens. It was a very intriguing beginning, with Kaycee and the part about 'Gordon's Trail'. Update soon! :) 

Author's Response: Thank you very much! Chapter 2 is in the works and should be up within a few days.

New Beginnings for All
Reviewer: Orual (Signed)
08/27/2006 04:13 pm

I think you've got a good start, I thought your descriptions of the wizarding world at war were very believeable.  However, I do think your need to be careful with your characterization of Harry and his impending romance with an original charcter (unless I'm assuming too much).  You've made Harry very independent and given him a grasp of magic that he never displays in the book, and then he's angry at Ginny on top of that when all she did in the book was try to avoid hurting him.  Combining that characterization with an American girl who has some sort of seer/prophetess power is a recipe for cliche if you are careless. 

All in all, though, I am curious to see where you are going.  Keep writing.

Author's Response: Well thank you very much. Yes, this story is very slightly AU in the fact that Harry knows more than was stated in cannon. While he is frustrated at Ginny, the larger reason for his leaving was a combination of him wanting to protect Ron and Hermione and his frustration with the Order. I always figured that Harry needed a strong girlfriend, and Ginny didnt show her usual strength when be broke up with her. As for the possible cliche, yes it definately could turn out that way, but I hope that my plot is unique enough to steer it away from that. No comment on the possible seer issue besides that it aint as simple as that. ;) Thanks again and I hope you stick with me!

New Beginnings for All
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