On the whole, you did a very nice job with this chapter. I find Matt's bounciness endearing, though he played a rather small role in this chapter. My only complaint is that I think you lost a little bit of Harry's character with: “No, not many would have done what you and your family did. I know plenty of people that would have cracked another one of my ribs and left me there. No one would take a stranger into their home.” It just seemed unnecessarily angsty. But you are the author.
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Thanks for the review! Don't worry about Matt's minor role. He is definately a character that i have plans for. this chapter was an intro to my OC's, some setting intro, and a bit of relationship development between Harry and Kaycee. Expect more action in the future.
You're right. Perhaps it was out of character, but i wanted the Pearsons to have a slight hint at Harry's past life. Thanks again!