I wish he hadn't smirked at the end there, it ruined an otherwise perfect ending.
This is a really nice story, very deep and heartfelt. I just wish the dialogue was a bit more relaxed... I mean, I know people change in war, but I don't think hi's speaking style would become quite so rigid.I did, though, really love these two lines: “I cast the Killing Curse at the cup,” he said suddenly, looking at the tomb bravely, with a hint of defiance, of rebellion in his eyes. After getting no reaction except for the hoot of an owl in the nearby forest, his shoulders sagged and he exhaled loudly.
Those lines just completely captured Harry and everything about his character, so brilliant job on that.
Keep writing!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review :) I'm glad you like the fic. Those are my fave lines as well.
Unfortunately, I'm not a fan of dialogue. Something I'm trying to cure, but usually, the characters don't cooperate, and I prefer narration.
Chris
Author's Response: I'm glad you like the fic :) Thanks for reviewing :)
Chris