Your story line started out well. But you seem to fly around different story lines now.
whats the deal with Ginny? Her attitude is almost dark, could she be the attacker?
Ooh, poor Ginny. *laughs* I wonder what was up with Harry, though. I think Voldy was influencing how he was acting, but I can't be sure. I liked how you described the spells Dumbledore was using on Ginny. I really do like how you do people's reactions in this story. Like in this chapter, Ron and Hermione's reactions to hearing about the memory charms. I wonder when Ginny will be better, and how mad Ron will be at Harry, if at all. Some lines I liked:
He couldn't really just walk up to Ron and say, Sorry Ron, I used some seriously dark magic on your sister, but cheer up, mate, I'm sure the bleeding will stop soon, could he?
Despite his lack of a phoenix, Harry made it back to the Fat Lady without incident.
Hehe, you really do have a lot of good lines in your stories. The first made me laugh. I liked how you did the conversation between Claire and Harry, too. *snickers* Eek, only 10 chapters left, I can't believe it. Ah well. I can't wait for more, I loved this one!! *laughs*