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Reviewer: Calamur (Signed)
11/05/2006 02:33 pm
I usually enjoy letter chapters. The letter Fred and George wrote were really nice, as was the name of the Goblin head. Another nice chapter

Author's Response: Thanks again for the review.  I felt this chapter needed a bit of a lift so that it wasn't to depressing, enter Fred and George everyones favorite pranksters.  Glad you enjoyed it.



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Reviewer: Calamur (Signed)
11/05/2006 02:26 pm
It's a very interesting start. I love your characterisation of Voldemort, although thank you isn't something he would say to any of his Death Eaters- especially Wormtail. It's a good job :)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review.  You know, as many times as I've reread this, its amazing that I missed something like Voldemort thanking Wormtail.  I guess it proves just how blind we authors can be when it comes to our work.  Gald you enjoyed it though.



Shape of Things to Come
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
10/28/2006 02:36 pm

Ah, back to the action! You did good handling Voldemort, very well written.

Be careful when using italics... if you're using them for thoughts, make sure that only the thoughts are italicized.

Very awesome chapter! I loved reading it.



Author's Response: Thank you.  This was the most fun chapter for me to write so far.  As they say, the board is set and the pieces are in motion.  Hope you continue to read along.



Until The End
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
10/28/2006 02:32 pm

Oh, manipulative Dumbledore. How Slytherin he can be, heh.

Another good chapter, keep it up!



Author's Response: Thanks for the review.  I think that anyone who has the amount of power and influence that Dumbledore has, can avoid being manipulative.  Even if it is with the best of intentions, which I think is the case with Dumbledore.



The God That Failed
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
10/17/2006 10:10 pm

Good chapter, this one seemed less pretentious. ;) The letters seemed a bit OOC - and designating Fred and George's line by line really wasn't necessary, try distinguishing by font instead (italics or bold and the like) - but it was a really, really good chapter. I loved the bit with the trunk, it made me laugh.

Great writing, and I can't wait for more!



Author's Response: Thanks for the review.  I liked the trunk bit too, thought it was a real funny image.  Glad you thought this was an improvement over the 1st.  I'll be a happy camper if each chapter is a little better than the last.



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Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
08/06/2006 02:44 pm
Very interesting. I will say that at times it felt... and here I'm going to be a horrible reviewer, because I don't know what I want to say. It seemed over-written, if that's a term. So many grandiose terms crammed into sentences, and paragraphs that seemed to repeat themselves. It just made the piece feel a bit intimidating overall, but it's a really good first chapter and I look forward to the rest.

Author's Response:

Hello,

Thanks for the review!  Sorry it has taken me so long to respond.  I took a break from my writing while I secured a Beta.  Now that I found one I am back at it.  The first chapter has been reworked a little, so if you reread it, hopefully you will see some of the issues you addressed cleared up.

Thanks Again,

EnigmaDecoder 

 




Shape of Things to Come
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