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Wow nice chapter. I really enjoye reading your story. However Please try not to give Hermione a nickname,, it reminds me too much of Mary sues.
The bond.. Stupid wormtail he should have stayed true to the oath. I hope he wil end upsaving Harry's life. I liked the idear of Harry, Ginnym, Hermione, and Ron renewing the oath.
Frodo_harry
Thank you for your review :-) Well, y'know, I'm not sure about Hermione and nicknames. If done correctly, it shouldn't be a bother. Don't actually remember writing the nickname though...
Ah well, the bond, yes, it'll be quite important for the end of the story. As far saving Harry's life, well, read on I'd say :-)
Reviews are like dirty windows..........I don't do them.
But I am enjoying the story.
Joyce
Well, I had official betas looking at grammar and such, and then you for pointing out the important stuff :P
Well, let's say thirteen will be eventful. Oh yeah, Harry will leave the midlife, he's got a quest, but how he'll exit it. *rubs hands in delight*
Thank you for reviewing! (I should really ask for reviews more in my author notes)
Snape did put the roses on the grave, and he'll return within a few chapters. That's all I'm going to say though.
The next two chapters are with my beta at the moment, and I'm writing the thirteenth chapter, so I'll be able to update soon.
Oh yeah, if you'd put close attention to the scene where Harry's hit by the Noxanimudiscerpo, then you'll be able to guess something ;-)
This was an okay first chapter. The very beginning, the way you drew the reader into the story, was really good. However, there were a lot of little problems that bothered me. You should sit down with a dedicated beta - it's worth the time and effort to find one, trust me - and work through the little details. To me, Molly Weasley seemed very out of character and spoke of things I don't think she was there for (concerning Ginny), and then the news article was too short and some of the details just felt underdeveloped.
I think plot wise, you're fine. I just think your story could use a little polish. I'll try to read the other chapters when I find the time! Keep writing!
Hmmm... Strange, how these first chaptes seem to take up further. Thanks for the advice, but I'm not sure what I'm going to do next. I've been reworking the first chapters for over a month, though I admit I haven't really rewritten the first chapter (thus holes should/could be in it). I had three beta's looking through it, though only one really did it good.
I'll consider it at least, thanks for pointing it out!