Very cute, I can't wait to read more. I just found a couple of tyos:
“B-But…” Little James’ lower lip trembled as he tried to hold up his innocent-little-boy-playing-in-the-sandbox façade, no doubt taught to him by his older brother, James. ----I'm guessing that this should have said little Sirius' lower lip trembled since James is mentioned later and Harry calls him Sirius.
waved his hand around a bit, using his wand that Sirius had conveniently ‘borrowed’ to erase and lingering traces of----erase *any* instead of and. :)
Good job though! Keep up the good work!
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