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Reviewer: jeanne (Anonymous)
04/29/2006 01:52 pm
sorry too weak and disjointed and an odd last 3 lines or so.good idea though.Just not explained nor carried far enough.


A Love That Refuses To Die
Reviewer: Calamur (Signed)
04/28/2006 02:01 pm

interesting drabble. It went in such a monotonous flow that it got slightly eye- straining towards the end

But don't let that discourage you. Next time just space the paragraphs out

cheers 




A Love That Refuses To Die
Reviewer: Pianochic1703 (Signed)
04/27/2006 09:13 pm
Interesting. It would be much easier to read if it was in paragraph format. I wished the romantic portion of this scene would have continued a bit longer, but that's just me...


Author's Response:

    I had a little technical difficulty with the paragraphs, I wrote it up on wordpad and it had all the paragraphs but when I transfered it they all combined together. I was about to be late for class so I just submited it and ran.

    I have another work in progress, when I get the time to enter it in I will make sure I edit in paragraphs to both.

                                                                    -Dragon




A Love That Refuses To Die
Reviewer: destin4fl (Anonymous)
04/27/2006 11:39 am
nice, but needs paragraphs.  also it makes editing easier, and is easier for your readers to follow.  next time try reading from the bottom up. you had words that were spelt correctly because of word check but in the wrong context.   otherwise good story.

Author's Response:

thanks i will try to keep that in mind




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