interesting drabble. It went in such a monotonous flow that it got slightly eye- straining towards the end
But don't let that discourage you. Next time just space the paragraphs out
I had a little technical difficulty with the paragraphs, I wrote it up on wordpad and it had all the paragraphs but when I transfered it they all combined together. I was about to be late for class so I just submited it and ran.
I have another work in progress, when I get the time to enter it in I will make sure I edit in paragraphs to both.
thanks i will try to keep that in mind