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Reviewer: Calamur (Signed)
04/30/2006 08:30 am

Agusta is worse than Mrs Weasley when it comes to being overprotective. Poor Neville

Also I would advice to increase the length of each chapter because they just stop suddenly

good work though 

Author's Response: Yes, Augusta is the epitome of overprotective.  She'll get better though.  That's what Neville has Lily for.  I apologize for the short chapters.  It's a frequent complaint but I can't seem to get them any longer.

Chapter 4
Reviewer: Calamur (Signed)
04/30/2006 08:14 am

ouch! that was way below the belt from gran

You have written James well.. from what i have read of him in book 5 he is astill a prankster but has grown up

another great chapter 

Author's Response:

Yes, it was but what can I say?  She's not perfect. 

That's pretty much the personality I'm trying to portray for James.

Thank you. 

Chapter 3
Reviewer: Calamur (Signed)
04/30/2006 08:11 am

you know it's a thought i always had regarding Neville. What if he were the boy who lived? and Harry's parents would be tortured into insanity by the Lestranges

Neville would have been raised by his grandmother and Harry (I shudder to think) because the Dursley's might have never come into play since the Potters' are alive

Loved your flow of words and another great chapter 

Author's Response:

I suppose that's the scenario that jumps to mind the quickest.  However, I would like to think that the being tortured to insanity is not a forgone conclusion for the parents of the boy not chosen.  Thus, I made use of creative licence.

I'm glad you enjoyed the flow.  That is one of the things I worry about most. 

Chapter 2
Reviewer: Calamur (Signed)
04/30/2006 08:07 am

Very Interesting start to a very interesting story. this is elseworld at its best


Author's Response: Thank you.  I hope that you continue to think so.

Chapter 1
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