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Reviewer: Spiderwort (Signed)
04/29/2007 11:21 am

Awww...I remember 'Snakes and Ladders'.  Colin sure is cute, but I thought I would have take you to task about how he couldn't possibly comprehend what Lily was telling him, but you fixed it by having his eyes glaze over in incomprehension.

Love it, as usual.

PS--I know Calamur's saying your chaps are too short.  but like 'em that way.  Lots easier to review, especially if you want to go back and hunt for quotes. 

I used to write that way too.  Then when I had to submit to sites that required 3000 words per, I just glued a couple of chaps together and put separators in between. 




Chapter 7
Reviewer: jayley (Anonymous)
02/10/2007 07:33 pm
i would think lily would mention things like a car in passing...


Chapter 10
Reviewer: Spiderwort (Signed)
11/10/2006 08:29 am

Once again, you explain so naturally that Carla mistakes Colin's report on his play time for a wild imagination.

It took me bqck to my own childhood.  We might have played  Aurors and dark wizards too(tee-hee) when we weren't being cops and robbers--or cowboys and indians.

Thanks!



Author's Response:

Thank you.  Your ability to pick out subtley inserted comments amazes me.  I sadly, never played Aurors and dark wizards though I did get ropped into a few games of cops and robbers (which usually involved me being tied up) but that could be explained that my younger brother was the only boy on our street.  We did play magical games though, which reminds me... 



Author's Response:

Thank you.  Your ability to pick out subtley inserted comments amazes me.  I sadly, never played Aurors and dark wizards though I did get ropped into a few games of cops and robbers (which usually involved me being tied up) but that could be explained that my younger brother was the only boy on our street.  We did play magical games though, which reminds me... 




Chapter 6
Reviewer: Spiderwort (Signed)
11/10/2006 08:22 am

I just love the way you blend magic with Muggle-dom, namely:

The way Augusta lets the Creeveys into the Fidelius Charm without letting them know about it and

The boys' conversation about the reason why the Creeveys moved--a very smooth explanation.  



Author's Response: Thank you.  I do try to make things flow in my writing.



Chapter 5
Reviewer: Spiderwort (Signed)
11/10/2006 08:15 am

you're the second writer I've read who presumes Lily's parents were both killed by DEs.  (Fanon?)

This is too cool--the way you treat the problem of the Spell vis-a-vis parenting practices.

Write on!



Author's Response:

While I know I'm not the first to suggest the Evans were killed by DEs I'd like to present my reasoning (since I rarely write anything without a reason). It is my humble opinion that Petunia hatred of magic is far too strong to be rooted merely in jealousy.  Also, her knowledge of dementors suggests some degree of familiarity with the wizarding world (I doubt she'd remember such a detail about something that had no personal siginicance to her).  Lastly, the fact that they were parents to a Muggleborn who made herself enough of an enemy in Voldemort that she'd defied him thrice, would no doubt make them DE targets.

Glad you enjoyed the chapter... thanks for reviewing. 




Chapter 4
Reviewer: Spiderwort (Signed)
11/10/2006 08:04 am
Ah, interesting take on the Fidelius.  Never thought of it that way, but it makes perfect sense, of course.

Author's Response: Thank you.  I wasn't aware that I was being particularly creative in my interpretation of the Fidelius. The way I've presented it is how I imagined it from it's description.



Chapter 3
Reviewer: Tiger of the Sky (Signed)
10/01/2006 06:50 pm

Ouch! I'm guilty as charged. I don't review because I never know what to say. I am enjoying the story, and I love the plot. I'm an avid reader, but sadly never a writer (no gift for it).

Joyce



Author's Response:

Thank you for reviewing.  I'm glad you're enjoying the story.  I aprechiate the feedback and hope to hear from you again; It doesn't have to be much.  A simple "I enjoyed this chapter" or "This is the worst chapter you've ever written" would suffice.  Though I would apprechiate a little elaboration if review in the latter manner...

Thanks again,

angelmorph 




Chapter 25
Reviewer: Spiderwort (Signed)
09/22/2006 06:18 am
Ooh, the plot thickens.  I like where it's going too.

Author's Response: Thank you.



Chapter 2
Reviewer: Spiderwort (Signed)
09/22/2006 06:13 am

This is a most intriguing idea.  I especially like that Frank would have chosen his mother--the redoubtable Augusta as their Secret Keeper.  So appropriate.

I also like how you cut to the chase in your ending.



Author's Response: Thank you for the review.  I'm glad you agree that there is no better secret keeper for the family than Augusta.



Chapter 1
Reviewer: Rabbie (Anonymous)
07/05/2006 10:11 pm

Interesting story... but I do have to say that it's rather creepy that the guy begged and screamed.

I liked it!  



Author's Response:

Thank you for you review.  I'm glad you're enjoying it.  Sorry for creeping you out there. 




Chapter 19
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